Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? All students should be required to study art and music in secondary school. Use specific reasons to support your answer.
Since tha ancient era until modern times, art and music played vital role in each society. People reflected their feelings by the help of them sometimes to a cave wall another times, to a canvas or sing. Many people consider that there are more significant lessons than them for kids at the stage of learning new knowledge. From my vantage point, I believe that they should be required to study at early of school. The lines will shed on light my viewpoint.
The first reason which deserves some word to say is about its effect on creativity. Actually, music and art increase creativity and boost analytical thinking. These abilities will be helpful for students in their future. According to the recent study, conducted at MIT University by the team of reputable scientists, many high scale managers have high sense of art and can play a musical instrument. Music helps managers interms of multi way thinking and make easy to manage a company. Consequently, study demonstrates the importance of art and music in work life.
Secondly, approaching this issue,apart from what mentioned about, there is another point which cross in my mind. Music has positive effects on person's health. Listening music reduce stress and ease tension and balance blood sugar. Students can be more motivate if music is a part of their life. furthermore, they are prevent kids from doing triffling activities and keep student in a railways. As a result, Music not only protect them bad habit but also keeps sharp student's mind
Thirdly, lack of sense of fine arts in the school puts students at a disadvantge in the social life. It becomes individual less sensitive in their private life. Thay make peole more human and emotional. What more, fine arts grab student's attention to the school and might make them more successfull.
To wrap it up, taking all aforementioned reasons into account, it would be concluded that one connot live without art and music. Schools should allocate more times for them since its importance. Even parent should teach at home.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, apart from, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1441.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 293.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9180887372 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5134937356 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.648464163823 0.524837075471 124% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.7047397177 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.05 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.65 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191049789093 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.055367749536 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461803949257 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118459821328 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295514852982 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.66 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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