Some people believe that human needs for farmland, industry, and… are more important than saving lands for endangered species. Agree/ disagree?
In the modern era and especially after the industrial revolution, the extent of exploiting the earth’s resources has raised a lot of debate among academicians. Some intellectuals hold the view that in order to achieve a swift transition into a modernized world we should make use of the world's resources as far as we can. However, others may take the opposite viewpoint and believe that it is wiser to pursue a sustainable and harmonious future rather than just making more profits out of the world. I personally favor the latter notion and will elaborate on my standpoint through some notable reasons in the following paragraphs.
My first reason and maybe the most significant one is that in my opinion, the world we live in belongs to all creatures, not the most dominant ones, human beings. It is not really fair to exert our power to displace other species from their natural habitats and endanger their lives while they have the same right to survive as us. I believe that if humans intend to create a charming and fantastic world, they should keep the balance there is now between all of the components of nature and not interfere with that.
The second reason I want to emphasize is that our intervention in nature has not already produce suitable results. People have already disturbed the balance existing between various species and prevent the cycles of life from proceeding in the normal way. Implementing development policies without paying enough attention to the complexity of terrestrial and marine life has led to a lot of disturbances to the wildlife throughout the world. Although decision-makers may think that their plans only involve deforestation of a small area of a jungle, they in fact have determined to ruin a plethora of elaborate predator-prey relationships which were previously established between a large variety of species over a long time. It results in putting a lot of threatened animals and plants, in that area and neighboring places, in danger of extinction. Humans should be aware of the negative consequences of their harmful actions on nature and attach more importance to environmental and sustainable concerns to preserve the world for all of its residents.
Lastly, we may have made a trip to an intact forest and remembered how impressive and extraordinary it was to look at a wide range of animals and plants. I personally get great pleasure out of breathing in that environment, because I sense I am just a minute part of a massive world. When I am out in a forest, the life and work pressures and concerns no longer irritate me since I am not now an engineer or father here, but I am a tiny component of nature. I think it is our responsibility to protect the grandeur and glory of wildlife and preserve it for the next generations. Beyond financial and developmental goals, people should appreciate the moment a bird drinks water from the edge of a lake and takes food for its chicks.
To sum up, based on the aforementioned arguments, there are a myriad of reasons that convince me to support the opinion that we should save habitats of threatened species. Some of the reasons, such as respecting the right of other species to live on the Earth, preventing disturbances to the cycles of life, and appreciation of the beauty and grandeur of the world, are mentioned above. However, that was like a story in a nutshell. Actually, there are some other reasons and examples challenging the claim, which are not mentioned above. All in all, I firmly, believe that the appealing aspects of the natural world are worth being saved.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 456, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...d keep the balance there is now between all of the components of nature and not interfere ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 63, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'myriads'?
Suggestion: myriads
...e aforementioned arguments, there are a myriad of reasons that convince me to support ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 173, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...ld save habitats of threatened species. Some of the reasons, such as respecting the right o...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, lastly, look, may, really, second, so, while, as to, i think, in fact, such as, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 95.0 52.1666666667 182% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2976.0 1977.66487455 150% => OK
No of words: 610.0 407.700716846 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87868852459 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.96972615649 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90968782813 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 313.0 212.727598566 147% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513114754098 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 951.3 618.680645161 154% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.8502947364 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.391304348 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5217391304 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04347826087 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147051772704 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0358282305624 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0347647397761 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0737171859387 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0108814944559 0.0645574589148 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 149.0 86.8835125448 171% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.