We can move to space exploration only when living on the Earth is completely safe. This supports the opinion that the money spent on space research is wasted until life on the Earth is fully protected. Personally, I agree with this claim and consider that people cannot move to space exploration until there is hunger, poverty and inequality on our planet.
First, spending money on space research is useless because in the same time millions of Earth habitants lack food. It will be more reasonable to invest money in agriculture and enhance production of foods. For instance, the head of my village invested regional budget in a new agricultural company instead of a historical monument, and two thousands of people in need could get products from this company cheaper or even for free. Therefore, the money should primarily be aimed to satisfy basic human needs.
Second, financial resources should be used to provide everyone with an adequate workplace. For instance, the committee of a bank where I had an internship devoted thirty percent of bank’s profit to the opening of new branches in regions of the country. This policy notably increased the level of employment in my state. Moreover, with newly hired workers, the yearly profit of the bank doubled. Thus, if financial resources are allocated to job creation, it will increase the general level of state welfare.
Third, the redistribution of money on the Earth will help to defeat inequality. For example, in the United States there is an idea of progressive taxation. According to this, the amount of tax payment depends on the size of person’s earnings. Consequently, rich people pay more taxes and poor – less. The state then may redistribute money to poor people in the form of subsidies and with this improve their well-being. In this way, the reallocation of financial funds within the planet and each state in particular will help to overcome income inequality.
Overall, rather than wasting money on space researches, people should spend it to solve sharp social problems – lack of food, poverty and income gaps. Only when the wellbeing of planet’s population reaches an acceptable standard, people can move on to explore the space.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, may, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, third, thus, well, for example, for instance, in particular
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1872.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12876712329 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76211944154 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567123287671 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9349471015 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.65 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203002945437 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590172785043 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521005957065 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113008473149 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0493835892924 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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