Some people believe that parents should pay their children a small amount of money to do jobs around the home (such as washing the dishes or taking out the garbage), while other people believe that parents should not pay their children to do these tasks. Which view do you agree with and why?
Undoubtedly, parents play an important role in children’s growing process, and they have the heavy responsibility of providing their children with the healthy environment to both foster their talents, and to establish the ground rule for their behavior. In this sense, there are various methods adopted by parents among which the one regarded as the issue of discussion is that whether parents should pay money to their children in exchange of their assistance in household chores or not. A popular sentiment to which I cling is that this policy will hopefully contribute to the strand of development in children. The underlying lines will shed light on my point.
The first focal point that prompts me to hold this idea is that this manner will help children to realize the value of money and learn how to manage monetary matters latter in their lives. To clarify, living in a world when the future is uncertain and most countries are struggling with economic recession, teaching children the value of money and the skill of managing it, appears necessary. In this regard the sooner children start to deal with money, the better they will be able to practice skills regarding earning and saving it. consequently, paying children a small amount of money in return of their help in-house will teach children that money is what which is earned not easily, but as a result of their efforts. Thus, they will be more cautious about how to spend this money and start to learn skills such as saving or prioritizing their needs in order to spend this money in the best possible way. My own experience is a clear example of this case, when I was a school student, my father used to pay me a small amount of money whenever I helped him in shopping. This money was so valuable for me, as I knew it is what I have earned in return of my own work, so I did not want to spend it on buying unimportant things and I started to save this money for years until this became a habit for me and helped me later in my life to manage my money in a wise way.
Another equally salient point in corroborating my stance in this subject is that it will assist parents to develop valuable features in their children including the sense of cooperation and helping others. To explain, children at early age are not mature enough to realize the importance and long-term benefits of doing some tasks assigned by parents, thus parents first need to prompt them into doing them by determining rewards and incentives for them, until it turns into a habit in children and by the time they understand the real intention behind these assigned duties. Similarly, the majority of children are not willing to help their parents in a house but by giving them money as a reward they feel obligated and encouraged to do it, and by the time by observing the positive influence of this manner on the family and their own personality, they will continue it regardless of these incentives. In fact, this is an acceptable method recommended by today psychology in upbringing children, through establishing a punishment and reward system helping parents to instill the codes of conduct into their children.
To sum up, the act of paying money to children appears an effective method applied by parents, as it not only will contribute to children’s better understanding out of the concept of money and managing it, but it will develop valuable features in them by the passage of the time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, regarding, similarly, so, still, thus, in fact, such as, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 103.0 52.1666666667 197% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2847.0 1977.66487455 144% => OK
No of words: 601.0 407.700716846 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73710482529 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.95129289623 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61985198219 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459234608985 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 873.0 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 20.1344086022 184% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.3780290199 48.9658058833 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 177.9375 100.406767564 177% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.5625 20.6045352989 182% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8125 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267901609842 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106370435484 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.070765938924 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182159377095 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0523504436833 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.7 11.7677419355 167% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.38 58.1214874552 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.5 10.1575268817 162% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.0537634409 167% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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