Some people believe that university students should be required to attend classes. Others believe that going to classes should be optional for students. Which point of view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer.
Attending university is a very important part of our lives. University is the first social place that many young people attend. It is the first place that students think they have opportunity to make decisions for their lives and so it is important that how they spend this stage of their lives. Some people believe that attending university classes should be optional rather than required; others would disagree. In my view, attending university classes should be optional for the following reasons.
First and foremost, some students cannot be present in the classes. Being in all the classes need financial support from the families and so the students who are from poor families who have to work do not have enough time to be in a class. For example, when I was at Melbourne University in Australia, my roommate’s father died in an accident. It was awful because after that her family facing fainancial crisis and inorder to overcome this problem she started to work and help her mother as she was the oldest children in her family. Thus, she was absent in all classes and because of that they made her to abandon the university and I knew how much she loved to continue her studies and become an architect. As you can see, it is not easy for all the students to be present in the classes and I think changing some old rules is really required because of the conditions that students are struggling with in today’s world.
Another reason is that making aatending classes optional causes the classes become more efficient. By making this change not only student who are in the class are in that place with their own wish, but also teachers try harder to convince and encourage the students to be present in their classes and so it is possible to examine the teacher’s performance. For instance, last week I read in the newspaper that they made a research to understand the efficiency of the students in classes that are optional or are not. For this purpose they chose to universities. In the first one students were forced to be present in the class and in the second one they have the opportunity to decide whether they want to be in that class or prefer not to attend that class. At the end of the semester, they took the same exam from both groups of the students and it becomes clear that in the second one the result was a lot better that the first one and they claimed that it is better to encourage the students to attend classes than force them to do so.
In sum, though some may believe that students are not mature enough to make the best decision for their lives and we have to force them to attend classes, but as you can see not only forcing the students will not help them, but it also take away opportunity to have a better life from some of them. And I think we have to remember that most of the scientists and successful people were from poor family and it is important to think about poor students too. I think all universities should reconsider their rules about attending classes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
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Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one student', 'a student', or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: one student; a student; students
...hey chose to universities. In the first one students were forced to be present in the class ...
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Message: Did you mean 'takes'?
Suggestion: takes
...tudents will not help them, but it also take away opportunity to have a better life ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, second, so, thus, for example, for instance, i think, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 15.1003584229 219% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2485.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 540.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60185185185 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82057051367 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48361641163 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.401851851852 0.524837075471 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 778.5 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.8622197067 48.9658058833 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.25 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313448439442 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117082555661 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0951850840982 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205551514596 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0665766988907 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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