Attending university is the most important part of many students. For most of the adolescents it is the first social place that they have the opportunity to meet different people with different cultures and it is also first place that they started to think and make decisions for their future. Some people think that university student have to be required to attend classes because of different reasons like they are not mature enough to understand what is good for them; others would disagree. In my view attending classes should be optional for the following reasons.
First and foremost, for some students it is not possible to attend classes, even though they really want. Being present in classes needs financial support of the family because the students do not have enough time to work and earn money. For example, back in New York, while I was in university, I had a roommate named Sarah. She was really intelligent and she really liked to be a architect. When she was a junior, her father died in a car accident. As she was the oldest child of the family, she started to work in a shop store to help her family to overcome their financial crisis that they faced after her father’s death. Thus, she was absent in all classes. After a month they made her to abandon her studies even though she got great marks in her studies. It was awful because I knew how badly she wanted to be an architect and I think it was not fair for her. As you can see by making attending the classes compulsory, they may ruin the future of some students that cannot be present in classes.
Second, it has been shown that when classes are optional, the efficiency of the students increases. Last week I read in the newspaper that in Germany scientists conduct a research in which they study the effect of making classes optional on students learning behavior. In this research they study two different classes with same teachers. At the first class students had to be present in all sessions. In the second one, attending classes was optional. At the end of the semester, the result was phenomenal. In the second class, the students were 2 times better than the other class. The researcher reported that when students have the opportunity to be absent in the classes, they will be present in the class with their own wish and with more energy. So the efficiency of the class will be increased. Also, the researchers notice that when the class was optional, the professors tried harder and taught better too. So, it is obvious that compulsory education do not have a good results.
In sum, though sum may believe that students are not still ready to make good decisions for themselves, but as you can see when they are allowed to decide for their life they get better results. Not only will it help them to be responsible for their lives but also it will prepare them for important decisions in future. I think all the universities have to consider these result and change their rules.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 380, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... intelligent and she really liked to be a architect. When she was a junior, her f...
^
Line 3, column 169, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...aper that in Germany scientists conduct a research in which they study the effect of makin...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 310, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ll prepare them for important decisions in future. I think all the universities have to c...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, second, so, still, thus, while, for example, i think, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 15.1003584229 219% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2452.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 525.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67047619048 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78673985869 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4719259982 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.445714285714 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 747.0 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1764031043 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.5714285714 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.75 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.53571428571 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281128231979 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0841898186328 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0735614373186 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176590648868 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0667176460322 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.