Some people believe that video games could inspire young students' interest and make their study more efficient rather than distracting them and waste time, so young students should be allowed to play video games.
Video games have become an essential part of our life, especially for the young generations. However, parents are now worried about their children playing them because of the negative effects. I strongly agree that video games cause more harm than good which I will examine in this essay.
For starters, video games can be potentially dangerous and violent. Games like first shooters, Moba are all related to blood and killing, and that is concerning since the young form their personalities during this age. There has been countless news about students killing people absentmindedly or intentionally. Also, studies have shown that most gamers are more emotional. They are more likely to use violence when they have a mode or be triggered by others.
Secondly, video games inevitably take away precious time for studying. For instance, a game of league of legends can last between thirty to an hour or more which is insane. Just think how much you will improve if you use that time for studying. Take my personal experience. I played games a lot in primary schools. The first thing I did after finishing homework was to hit the computer. I did not pay much attention to school and never bothered to preview. As you would have guessed, my academic performance was not that good-looking. However, things changed after entering high school as I got rid of this habit, focusing on the real task on hand. The result is significant as my grades skyrocketed to the height I could not dream of in the past. If I did not stop playing video games back then, I could not have had today's achievements.
Apart from all the negative points above, playing video games is not good for your physical health. Just siding on a chair for a long period of time is alarming enough. Your blood circulation will be clogged, followed by the sored neck. Your eyes will ache as well, which suggests decreased eyesight. Again, I experienced all of these symptoms above, and trust me, they are not what you want to encounter. I had perfect eyesight before but after several years of gaming, I was forced to wear glasses. A sad story indeed.
To put it in short, playing video games have more negative effects than good. It is for our health, our career, and the greater good that we should not play them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 148, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... related to blood and killing, and that is concerning since the young form their personalitie...
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Line 7, column 135, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...alth. Just siding on a chair for a long period of time is alarming enough. Your blood circulat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, well, apart from, as for, as to, for instance, in short
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1900.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79797979798 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53295794103 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575757575758 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.6761622156 48.9658058833 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 67.8571428571 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.1428571429 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28571428571 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281188291246 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0673482954689 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650763648836 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167817472905 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0589520963046 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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