some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. others believe that it is better to spend this time doing something related to the schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Since the beginning of the current century, life has become very advanced and competitive which makes parents could not spend too much time with their children. There is a controversial debate which is often raised about this thorny question, which is the best way the parents should spend their free time with their kids. Some people hold the view that they should spend it in education, however others claim that they better spend that time having some fun with their kids. My personal point of view, I concur the latter opinion given that it has appositive impact on kids’ relationships, molarity, and physical fitness. Below I will strive to explain my supporting reasons in more details.
The foremost point, provided that parents spend time playing with their kids, they will build strong relationships with them. A vivid example can be given to shed a light on what was elaborated above is, kids in Egypt very attached to their parents given that most of parents usually spend quality time with their kids every weekend such as, playing games, watching a movie, or even having valuable conversation. To put it in another way, children feel loved and secured which is very important for their mental status. Consequently, spending pleasant time with children is significant.
Next, coupled with strengthens kids’ relationship with their parents, improve their physical fitness is another reason why it is very important for parents to spend time playing sports with their kids. The noteworthy refreshing intelligible statistics, revealed by a recent survey conducted by Oxford university found that playing any kind of sport constantly minimize the risk of some kids’ diseases such as juvenile diabetes and obesity. Provided that, parents paly sports with their kids during their free time, they will encourage them to be healthier. Therefore, spending time playing with kids has a positive impact on their life.
Although the aforementioned reasons are the first ones which cross the mind at a glance, they are not the only reasons available. In fact, there is another subtle point which must be born in mind. Eventually, schools could teach students the academic subjects but they could not educate them morality; moreover, it is parents’ responsibility. I believe in the old saying “it takes a village to raise a child”. Spending quality time with kids, parents could pass on values and morals to their offspring. As a result, parents can gain great benefits from spending good time with their kids.
Taking everything into a consideration, without a doubt spending pleasant time with kids has a great impact rather than doing things related to schoolwork, and underestimating the significance of these benefits for kids is not logical. It is suggested that parents compromise and ensure to achieve education/enjoyment balance time with their kids.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, in fact, kind of, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2435.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28199566161 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77570654875 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531453362256 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 722.7 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.9772270788 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.952380952 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9523809524 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.384474680203 0.236089414692 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132790487239 0.076458572812 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0999903468405 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237165687349 0.150856017488 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0534848465459 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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