Most of the people think parents should spend their time with children to work on children's lesson. In my opinion, it will be better if parents spend their time having some fun with children. I will explain my reasons and examples in the following paragraphs.
First of all, children like to have a more friendly relationship with their parents that this will be possible in doing some entertainment or sports. In reality, when parents spend time with children and do some fun activities, they become closer together and become more comfortable with each other. Some parents especially fathers have serious characteristics even with children; Children like parents change this characteristic and become closer to them. The more fun games together, the more love creates among them. In doing fun things, they show their real personalities to each other. Having fun together makes love and closeness among children and parents. For instance, I had a friend, I remember when I asked her why do you like your father more than anyone in life. She answered me because my father played sports with me and playing sports with him causes to know my parents better and love him more than anyone. Not only having fun with parents causes have a great time together, but also it makes a more friendly relationship among parents and children.
Moreover, doing sports together make children healthier. Students, especially during school time, will face pressure, academic workload and lots of classes. Parents should make time for their children to have some physical exercises. If parents and children can walk out together, breathing fresh air and enjoy the sunlight, their health will be improved.
All in all, parents should have fun and entertainment with children. This will be more aware of children's behaviors and also it will improve their health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, while, for instance, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1553.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 303.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12541254125 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58439655129 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471947194719 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 456.3 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.7658970334 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.2777777778 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8333333333 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.378943921503 0.236089414692 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146766189224 0.076458572812 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0932160916494 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.247838481116 0.150856017488 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0736517270008 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.09 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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