Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their
children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer.
Over the past years, the issue of whether or not in the modern era by hectic lifestyle parents have a little time for spending by children; so they must use of it to have a fun time with them or to do their children’s homework has a great deal of attention from parents and psychologists. Although some may say that fathers and mothers had better spend free time with children by doing their homework because of the importance of education; I, as well as many others, believe that parents ought to spend free time with their kids by having fun playing for improving their relationships, children’s creativities and skills.
First of all, an important reason why spending fun time with children more important than doing school work is that it helps increasing relationship among children and parents. Many psychologists assert that one factor for children to being in a good condition of mental health is having a good relationship with their parents. In this situation, juveniles seem that father and mother are the same as their friends, and they would able to share their feeling without any problems with them. So, they know that their parents help them to solve their problems, selecting the best choice and having a good friend.
Another reason for this point of view is that children show their talent when they do their favorite activities. When children have adequate time for playing, parents can concentrate on their style of play and they understand their children’s talent. For example, my little brother always played with some toys and goods like pot to playing sound like a musical instrument. Since my parents had spent enough fun time with him, they understood my little brother has a talent in the field of music. So, they made a situation that their boy follows his talent, and now he becomes a famous and flourishing musician.
Finally, it is occasionally said that it is better for parents to spend their free time having fun with their children because children's education is better to be limited to schools these days. A good educational system is that limited student’s education in the schools. I mean that children must learn their lesson at school, and they do not need to spend time at home studying and learning their lesson. And teachers are well aware of the students need for their educational improvements and could monitor the whole of their education process without the help of the parents. Consequently, parents do not need to be involved in their children school work matters, and it is better for them to enjoy their limited free time with their children.
To sum up, considering the ideas presented in the paragraphs above, I personally believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports rather than doing things that are related to school
work chiefly due to the influence of these activities on the children's mood and relationship with their parents and the independence of the education system.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 35, Rule ID: WHETHER
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Over the past years, the issue of whether or not in the modern era by hectic lifestyle p...
Line 6, column 126, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to increase' or 'increase'.
Suggestion: to increase; increase
...than doing school work is that it helps increasing relationship among children and parents...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, if, may, so, well, for example, i mean, as well as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2552.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 520.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90769230769 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77530192783 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6131664802 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448076923077 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 735.3 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.0237430526 48.9658058833 186% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.117647059 100.406767564 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.5882352941 20.6045352989 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.17647058824 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.460454032262 0.236089414692 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.168605043871 0.076458572812 221% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.140015500421 0.0737576698707 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.300527057255 0.150856017488 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.188366456191 0.0645574589148 292% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
automated_readability_index: 17.0 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.79 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 10.002688172 270% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 27.0 10.247311828 263% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.