Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to sc

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Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, people are living in a faster pace. For parents, the impact can be significant. They do not have enough time to be with their kids, like the good old days. With such a limitation of time, parents usually fall into a dilemma of using the time. Some prefers to spend the precious time to play games with children, while others reckon that it is better to have some inclination on the schoolwork. Personally, I think it depends on the age the kids.
For young kids, the best choice is to share the time on the schoolwork. At the stage, the difficulty of the course is apperciate for the parent to give some advices, so the kids can obtain many useful knowledege in the commication. Also, the parents are capable to deal with the problems in the specific topics in this stage, giving rise to the construction of authority as parents. One example is my best friend, Ben. In his sixth grade of primary school, he had some difficult in finishing his academic work. I could still remember the scenario during that period. He was asked to stay home to finish the exercises. His mother, with full spirit of a caring parent, company with him as her work finished. As the schoolwork in the primary schools are just basics for an adult, the supervision of Ben's mother enabled him to get solution to anything he was confused wtith. After the essential semester, his grade and rank rised in a surprising way and admitted by the honor of "Excellent Graduates". Later, Ben use the word "heroine" to experess his respectiveness on his mother, because his mother saved his performance in the school.
However, it is not suitable for these in later stage of study. The schoolworks are getting harder and more specific, so that the parents may be unable to deal with the barrier in the study. In this condition, they should spend time together with their children on game or sports. With these activities, they can enhance the bond of a healthy relationship. As both the parents and kids are getting busier, this is a good way to prevent the indifference among the family members.
In sum, the parents should take different strategies as their kids grow older. But the most important is to keep a caring attitude for both parents and kids.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 926, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a surprising way" with adverb for "surprising"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...tial semester, his grade and rank rised in a surprising way and admitted by the honor of 'Exce...
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Line 2, column 1019, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Ben) must be used with a third-person verb: 'uses'.
Suggestion: uses
...s;Excellent Graduates'. Later, Ben use the word 'heroine' to experes...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, still, while, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1859.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73027989822 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75370738989 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549618320611 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.8903880096 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.4583333333 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.375 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.25 5.45110844103 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260788280062 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687996813395 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0902188192647 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162224983067 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124157169616 0.0645574589148 192% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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