Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
There is a long-running debate about whether parents should pay more time on playing with children or on accompanying with children's schoolwork, especially for the scenario that parents do not have sufficient period. For my perspecive, I believe that the former would contribuate to both the mental and physical health of children, which should be invested more.
First of all, playing with children would increase their physical health. Nowadays, the illness rate of children was gradually increasing, and shown a trending in younger kids. Therefore, the physical health of children cannot be ignore by parents. Sports is obviously worthwise for parents to choose as an option to accompany with their children. According for a report from WHO, propriatly daily sports will significantly improve children's ability to defend illness, especially in their growing ages. In addition, today's students are required to stay in classrooms from day to night, which is harmful for their growing. Therefore, sports with children allow children to grow stronger and more healthy, which reduce the negative impace of their long time spending in schools.
Moreover, playing is also contribute to children's cognitive ability. Since many video games project 3D model and environment onto a traditional 2D screen or television, it is required children to have compatent ability on space imagnation. Based on a recently published study, playing video games could greatly improve children's cognitive ability, which is also have positive connection with their academic performance. Therefore, if parents could pay more time on playing games with their children, they may expect a little improvement in their children's performance.
To sum up, due to the plentiful help during the growing of children, I prefer to accompany with my children more time on playing games or sports.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, in addition, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 43.0788530466 37% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1581.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 288.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48958333333 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81797093063 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559027777778 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9430686241 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.928571429 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5714285714 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272701915604 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103261896937 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.069100064967 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183143495969 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0232568376464 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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