It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
There are two kinds of works: one requires people to work for long hours in three days of a week, and another, just oppositely, requires people to work five days a week but shorter hours. Some people may like to arrange their works into different days. However, I prefer the former, since it would give me more creativeness and a better balance between work and life.
First of all, concentrate working in a relatively long period could increase one's effectiveness. Because our brains would more likely to immersed into a specific mode called "mind flow" when we really focus on the current work. Under this scenario, one could ignore surrounding interruptions, such as smartphone ringing, other people's talking, and noise from the air-controllings. In addition, this scenario is especially helpful to reduce the amount of mistakes one could perform. People under this condition could hardly notice surrounding or the time slash, they will only feel brains tired after working. An appropriate example is not very far to seek. For instance, many gamers try their best to finish video games as soon as possible, this is called "speed running". Much of the best records of speed running were achieved when the gamer was under their "mind flow" condition. Therefore, a relatively long period of working may contribute for people to entry their mind-flow condition, and achieve high effectiveness.
Moreover, a concentrated working could be followed by a long period of rest. This is critical for citizen nowadays, since almost all of us have the demand for accompanying with their families. A long period of rest indicates a lot: traveling to more far away places, playing with more friends, and take care of children more attentive. What's more, this is also helpful for working, since more demand can be suited, when they come back to work, they can more concentrate in their work. However, one could sporadically distract by venial from their family during working if they have no time to finish them in their holidays, which will reduce their performance.
To sum up, I will definitely stand with the scenario that allows me to concentrate on working in a relatively long period, then enjoy life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, then, therefore, for instance, in addition, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1873.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1456043956 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79069363378 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57967032967 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2408380528 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.055555556 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2222222222 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.44444444444 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235175936123 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722689628825 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0797275591524 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155933195179 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0915438248328 0.0645574589148 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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