Solutions to prevent injuries of glass to birds
Many birds are injuried by the glass since they could not distinguish transparent glass with air and sky. The passage mentions that some behavior could helpful to reduce the injuries of glass to birds, including using one-way glass, covering colorful patterns, and producing magnetic fields. But the lecture considers them unconvincing.
The passage begins by arguing that instead of traditional glass, the novel one-way glass could contribute to this problem. Nevertheless, the lecture counters this, point out that although the one-way glass is identical as the traditional glass for people inside the buildings, it would perform as a mirror for birds outside. The one-way glass would reflect the light from sky and trees, which will confuse the birds that the one-way glass is the external part of sky or trees. As a result, birds will just fly and hit to the one-way glass. Therefore, the assertion of the passage does not sound reasoning.
Furthermore, the passage assumes that colorful design patterns covering on the glass should warning the birds about the extistence of glass, and also keep visibility for people inside the buildings. The lecture, however, suggests this may not be merited by the evidence. The birds would mistakenly consider the space between the patterns as holes, and try to fly across this holes. In fact, the glass must have specific patterns on it to achieve the goal, in which case the people inside could hardly recieve enough sunlight. The passage cannot bolster the recommendation without ruling out the refutation.
Last but not the least important, even if the evidence turns out to support the passage that artifical magnetic field would be useful to resolve the problem since birds use it to navigate their trips, one critical fact is being left out of consideration. The lecture points out the passage neglects the truth that birds only rely on magnetic field during a long trip. For more frequent short movements, birds use their eyes to direct themselves. Therefore, artifical magnetic field could hardly be efficient for birds live in cities. The passage must explain more persuasively to reach the cited conclusion.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 371, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...atterns as holes, and try to fly across this holes. In fact, the glass must have spe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 5.04856512141 317% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1822.0 1373.03311258 133% => OK
No of words: 350.0 270.72406181 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20571428571 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56258160647 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 145.348785872 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525714285714 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 419.366225166 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.23620309051 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.7645124752 49.2860985944 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.222222222 110.228320801 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4444444444 21.698381199 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05555555556 7.06452816374 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264856596801 0.272083759551 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0899669732074 0.0996497079465 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0826865932685 0.0662205650399 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179391885526 0.162205337803 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0753065933656 0.0443174109184 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.3589403974 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.2367328918 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 63.6247240618 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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