some people like to buy a piece of technology as soon as it is available in the markets. do you agree or disagree?
We are living in a sophisticated age technology have a profound impact on our lives. People are always trying to make their lives more convenient, successful and exciting. Some people believe that it is better for people to wait for some new piece of technology, while other are convinced that people should buy it as soon as it is available in the market. After carefully pondering it from several aspects, I strongly agree with the latter idea. There are some reason, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
First of all, obviously, when something come into market, it is really interesting for people to buy it as soon as they can. Because most of people wait for a long time to buy it and I think there is no logical reason to wait for it. It is possible that some people are concerned about the performance of these devices which I am sure that they have been tested a lot before coming into market. To illustrate this fact, on need only refer to the numerous well-equipped laboratories of companies for testing their devices. Seldom do they sell their product with the flaw. Although people should spend more money if they want to buy these devices soon, what results from buying sooner is to make them happier. For example, the noteworthy intelligible results, which conducted in our country, how that approximately 90 % of people buying these devices as soon as it is available in the market, are one wanting exciting life and they always want to experience new positive things.
The second reason why I agree with it is that, undoubtedly, new devices are able to provide a great opportunity for people to experience better life. I should say again, there is no logical reason to wait for it. People need to bring something in their life making their life more convenient and they should buy these devices as soon as it comes into market. The modern world offers abundant example of people have better life due to presence of advanced tools in their life. Imagine that, you can buy a mobile which enable you make better photo and provide you use the internet easier. Were I be a determiner in our country, I would have established a center in order to give loan to people for buying new devices. There is a well-known proverb in Persian, the equivalent of which in English may sound like this” the more people use the technology, the more they would be prosperous”. As a result, what I am certain is that if people use the new facilities, they are able to increase their level and bring themselves several lucrative consequences.
To make a long story short, no one can deny the enormous effect of new devices as soon as they can on their life. Not only is it really interesting, but also it provides an opportunity for them to experience better lives. I highly recommended that people buy new devices and benefit their advantages.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 133, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
... to buy it as soon as they can. Because most of people wait for a long time to buy it and I th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, second, so, well, while, for example, i think, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2385.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 505.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72277227723 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66314962353 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441584158416 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 773.1 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1873394055 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.695652174 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9565217391 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65217391304 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249438241523 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0730182158798 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624948871108 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164677066642 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0699980445515 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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