It is obvious that nowadays humans are trying to overcome their difficult situations in their life in order to improve their lifestyle and achieve their objectives. Some people prefer to rely to realistic goals in their lives, while I believe that it is much better for them to be ambitious individuals and follow their ambitious. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss my view using some reasons and examples.
I think people should concentrate on their ambitious dreams due to the fact that human beings only are born once during their life; thus, it reveals the paramount importance of following dreams. In fact, people who are ambitious have stronger wills to reach their aims and make a lot of effort to fulfill their desires. Ambitious goals are more difficult than realistic aims; therefore, it will lead persons to utilize all of their abilities, talents, and knowledge to satisfy their objectives. For example, Anoshe is the first astronomer woman in the world. Traveling to the space was her dream during her childhood. Hence, he made myriad attempts to enter well-known university and used her whole abilities and skills to overcome obstacle which existed in her path. Finally, she could succeed and traveled to the space.
Moreover, I believe that people who are ambitious are more successful than others because they are optimistic about their future. Even though they cannot achieve their final goal, they learn many things during their path. They will never be disappointed with their failure and defeat; rather, they would learn from their unsuccessfulness and gain invaluable experiences. For instance, in my country, one of the more popular football players had had difficult living conditions in his childhood and his father prevented him to play soccer and pursue his interests. But, he decided to migrate to capital and endured plenty of hardships so that today he is a good player and has become a famous person and have an excellent life; also, he helps poor people and contributes to the charity.
To sum up, in my point of view, according to the points and examples mentioned above, it will be more beneficial for people to follow their dreams rather than realistic aims.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, in fact, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1864.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12087912088 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59669161242 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574175824176 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0954605983 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.5 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 5.45110844103 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197555581265 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0668264143724 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0685781401483 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13049154086 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428295899012 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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