Some people prefer to focus on ambitious dreams while others think realistic goals are more important.
What is your opinion?
Throughout history, in all civilized society, individuals have made effort to enhance their lives by defining some aims for themselves. Although a plethora of people hold the opinion that ambitious goals are more lucrative, others disagree with this point of view and believe that human beings should have some real aims in their lives. Although a certain conclusion cannot be made, I, to a considerable extent, hold the latter viewpoint. Among countless reasons, which can vindicate my point of view, I will mention the two most conspicuous ones through the following paragraphs.
The first reason that juts out of my mind easily at the first moment of thinking about this issue is the fact that people who have realistic goals, have a great deal of impetus in their tasks since they know that it is possible to reach all of their aims. Some people may believe that ambitious dreams motivate persons more than realistic ones. Although this point of view is not erroneous, people with this opinion should consider the fact that people cannot achieve this kind of goals since they are just dreams. Therefore, after a while, they will become frustrated and stop trying in their lives. To give a tangible example, consider a student who is graduated from high school, and he is going to take part in the universities entrance exam to go to a high-ranked university. Since he know that this purpose is achievable, he study very hard, and do not become disappointed. In other words, entering the university induce him to try profoundly to achieve his aim. Therefore, the more someone has realistic purpose, the more he would passionate to work hard and make them true.
The second and equally exquisite proof for this assertion is about this importance that having real aims leads to success sine people with real aims, have excellent plans in their lives. Genuinely, they carry out everything according to some effective plans, which are very precise, and will lead to success. For instance, the noteworthy statistics revealed by a recently conducted research in the Massachusetts Institute of Technology (MIT) shown that individuals who follow their real goals are more successful since they know that their goals are achievable, and adjust some extraordinary schemes foe receiving them.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, we may draw the conclusion that it can be more advantageous for human beings if they have realistic purposes. This contention is due to the fact that not only does having this kind of goals motivate people to try harder but also these individuals are more prosperous in their lives. Consequently, the more someone think realistic, the more benefit he will gain.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 790, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'knows'.
Suggestion: knows
...o to a high-ranked university. Since he know that this purpose is achievable, he stu...
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Line 2, column 831, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'studies'.
Suggestion: studies
...now that this purpose is achievable, he study very hard, and do not become disappoint...
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Line 3, column 361, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[5]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'recently conducted research'.
Suggestion: recently conducted research
..., the noteworthy statistics revealed by a recently conducted research in the Massachusetts Institute of Techn...
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Line 3, column 590, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'schemes'' or 'scheme's'?
Suggestion: schemes'; scheme's
...hievable, and adjust some extraordinary schemes foe receiving them. To make a long st...
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Line 4, column 382, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'thinks'.
Suggestion: thinks
...r lives. Consequently, the more someone think realistic, the more benefit he will gai...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2269.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05345211581 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67606309417 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523385300668 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.981073769 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.055555556 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9444444444 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209697065909 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.071862341648 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0738249352314 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133515019453 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.038927885737 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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