I completely agree with the latter statement. As the internet is developing rapidly, information become more and more available almost for everyone. But, this significant revolution also brings negative influence on our daily life. Three elaborated reasons are following to support my view.
First and foremost, since we could get a huge of information from the internet easily, and most of the time, without paying, it is difficult for us to pick up the valuable information effectively. Just imagine that every morning, when we begin to turn on the phone, news, messages from our colleagues, movements from the wechat, they suddenly come to you so actively and unconsciously. We are accustomed to be occupied by these useless information and easily be distracted. It is really a waste of time.
Secondly, the slow rhythm of living life in the past has passed by already. Too much accessible information has increased the modern competition. We used to live spotted in your country, with the information, we begin to flow into the big cities which consist of more resource. But this kind of immigration imposes on pressure to both the city and ourselves.
The last but not the least, we should pay attention on the internet security issues. Our private information is posed on the internet. And some company even run the business to collect these information and restore them in the database. Do you remember the moment when you are disturbed by a call by strangers to advertise you? More severely, the fraud groups use these private information to commit crimes which could bring damageable disaster to our ordinary people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...asons are following to support my view. First and foremost, since we could get a...
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Line 3, column 394, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[4]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'accustomed to being'.
Suggestion: accustomed to being
...u so actively and unconsciously. We are accustomed to be occupied by these useless information a...
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Line 5, column 318, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... But this kind of immigration imposes on pressure to both the city and ourselves....
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Line 7, column 186, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...ompany even run the business to collect these information and restore them in the database. Do yo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1369.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 268.0 407.700716846 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10820895522 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85217934988 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.638059701493 0.524837075471 122% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.8816976284 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.5294117647 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7647058824 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47058823529 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206139977307 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590786491572 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471024613035 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115924613165 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.031657315447 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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