With the development of modern technology, tremendous changes have taken place in our daily life. The children used to keep in touch with nature in their majority of leisure time, but they are gradually occupied by attractive computer games. It seems like that computer games have a negative influence on the new generations. But as to me, I believe, computer games should be limited and guided by the parents rather than completely be not allowed to.
First and foremost, computer games are designed elaborately by intellectual people for relaxation and entertainment. Without the entertainment, the whole world would be boring. There are different kinds of games just designed for children, such as within an engineering car topic. Children could learn the different characteristics of various types of engineering cars. In this case, it will save the parents money from buying model toys for the children.
Secondly, it is uncontroversial that computer games is time-consuming. Children can easily get addicted into computer games once they get chance to access as they are poor self-controlling. But the key solution is teaching and learning of the time management rather than never be allowed to try. As the children grow up, it is inevitable for them to learn how to manage and balance their time. Better to learn, to operate and practice it under the guidance of their parents. Parents should also help to pick up the proper games for children to play with.
Last but not the least, the technology development is a trend that we cannot avoid. Disadvantages are associated with the great change as well. For example, the use of computer could lead to a declination of our eyesight, but sometimes the sacrifice of it should be accepted. We could never gain something without paying nothing .
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 402, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
...ng cars. In this case, it will save the parents money from buying model toys for the ch...
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Line 7, column 329, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...er gain something without paying nothing .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, well, as to, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1512.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 295.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12542372881 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94826185934 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583050847458 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.5063166712 48.9658058833 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.5789473684 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5263157895 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05263157895 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297198239528 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.082111891293 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653602406197 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167350216281 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0793851204173 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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