Some people say that nowadays there is less communication between family members Do you agree or disagree Giver relevant examples from your experience

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Some people say that nowadays there is less communication between family members. Do you agree or disagree? Giver relevant examples from your experience

There is no denying that means of communication among members of the same family have changed over the years. Personally, I agree that nowadays there is less communication between family members for two reasons that will be further explored in the following essay.

Firstly, there is a hectic workload and tight schedules that do not leave any spare time for family members to meet and gather during their daily routine. People spend most of their active hours in their workplaces. Consequently, they are too tired to exert any other activities when they get back to their homes. In fact, a study done by the University of Hong- Kong shows that people spend from 11 to 12 hours daily at work. That means that parents arrive at their homes late and exhausted. Accordingly, less precious time is spent with their family members. Unlike in the past, people worked only for 6 to 8 hours, and thus they had more spare time and energy during the day to spend with their families.

In addition, youth nowadays are very ambitious and more into traveling to other countries for better job opportunities, which makes it hard for them to meet their family members like before. Obviously, migration is a trend. For example, both my sister and my brother moved out to Canada and Australia. Therefore, we can only see each other once a year due to the long distance and expensive flight tickets. However, in the past people had lower expectations and did not have this urge to orient their lives around their careers. It is irrefutable that life has changed from a family-oriented style to a more self-centered career style. I really miss my childhood, when we would gather at dinner, and my father would tell us stories about great men of history.
To sum up, I believe that people spend most of their time working and they move out away from their families to have better jobs. Those 2 factors led to less precious time and communication among family members.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, really, so, therefore, thus, for example, in addition, in fact, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1619.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 338.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7899408284 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54464186062 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.57100591716 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4974345786 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.9444444444 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7777777778 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.16666666667 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171802386431 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0570005518765 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0609128747753 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132781358348 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0704454659997 0.0645574589148 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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