Since the dawn of humanity, there has been a ton of debate as taking risks is either helpful for success or not. As far as I am concerned, I subscribe to the idea that being careful and cautious enjoys more merits than daring. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will develop in the subsequent paragraphs.
First of all, it is not definite that people who take risks would be successful, and the chance of achieving a goal or failing is even. Cautious and prudent people always draw up a detailed plan for their path and follow those programs. Under these circumstances, it is crystal clear that careful people would predict what problems are coming next, so they could devise some remedies for their issues with accuracy. On the other hand, since the future is mainly blurry for people who take risks, they do not have a reliable strategy when facing difficulties. Therefore, it leads them to an unknown result, which does not guarantee that they can get successful or not. Drawing from my own experience, my uncle is a thoughtful mechanical engineer who always thinks profoundly about the results of his decisions before accepting any project. Once he got a fantastic offer from a company to repair their machines, but he had not the required equipment to fix those devices. Therefore, he thought cautiously and recognized that it was more beneficial to reject the project. Had he accepted that proposal, he would have been obliged to spend a lot of money to buy needed equipment, even more than the money offered by the company.
Secondly, people who do not take risks are endowed with more mind relaxation than other people. It is worth mentioning that people who take risks are always nervous about what would happen next; thus, it takes their convenience. I have to admit that my personal experience has profoundly influenced my opinion on this matter. My friend is a bitcoin trader, which is significantly a risky job. Most of the time, he is on his phone checking the bitcoin’s price. That is why he usually cannot enjoy the moment because he is anxious about his trades. Accordingly, without any shadow of a doubt, we can conclude that taking risks has a significant role in taking away people’s peace of mind.
In conclusion, in light of the reasons mentioned, I firmly believe that taking risks not only has no guarantee to make people successful, but it also makes people nervous about the consequences of their decisions.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2032.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82660332542 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6495263221 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562945368171 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9511501851 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.6 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.05 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309773522941 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0888782181301 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.079838028483 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180929333529 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047829272113 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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