Some people say that we should always follow our dreams, even if the dreams are very ambitious. Others think that we should focus on achieving realistic goals.
Dreams demonstrate us with the overall picture of how we want our lives to be. People always admire those who can realize their dreams, and these people are also considered as lucky ones. When it comes to personal goals, some are afraid of to think boldly because of lacking confidence. However, from my perspective, I think ambitious dreams prepare us to be successful as long as we dissolve the impossible mission into small phases, which finally helps us to achieve what we want in the end.
Being ambitious does not mean you do not have a plan. On the other hand, it just means that you are on your way to figure out what you really desire to do. Facing a challenge project, you will begin to make plans. You can mold our dreams with logical and analytical thinking. Say you want to be an astronaut? First, you should be a straight-A student in high school and take relevant courses. You then go to college with professional training or strong research team regarding this field. Someday you may join the Air Force after finishing your curriculum. In this way, dreaming itself becomes an inspiration to push one to act on every divided step.
Another important reason lies in the fact that being too pragmatic may lead to mediocre life. We all have some friend around us telling us how different his life would be if he had worked harder when he was younger. In fact, it may be true that such person was too conserved to leave his comfort zone to chase his dream by ignoring realistic concerns. Carroll Bryant once said, “The only thing standing between you and your dreams is reluctance”. I have a friend who wants to become a singer, and she has learned singing for years and spent numerous nights in a street bar to sing for people who hardly can appreciate her great voice before she actually signed up her first contract with a record company. Such stories are not rarely seen in daily life.
Dreams may seem vague and unfocused at first, but it is the dreamers’ job to make dreams come true with their insightful thoughts and efforts. With open-minds, any success can be expected.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, really, regarding, so, then, as to, i think, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1752.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70967741935 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51516386231 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.650537634409 0.524837075471 124% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.4999514091 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.4285714286 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7142857143 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206937804901 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0532991324973 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513838375902 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122062193324 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0742605035626 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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