Some people think that earning a high salary is the most important thing about a job. Others think that doing enjoyable work is more important, even if the job does not pay well
Personally, I see more positive aspects of earning high salary. Firstly, with high income you become more ambitious and dedicated to your job and you feel valued. Secondly, you can have the lifestyle you want with enough money.
To begin with, every person starts working with the intention to earn money. When the salary is not that big the worker does not feel motivated enough. On the other hand, when you have well paid job you start to be more dedicated to it and more productive. For example, when I was an intern, my internship was paid and I felt more valued and I worked even more. It was the opposite with non-paid interniship during which I was being late more often. I need to admit that the opinion ot this matter is profoundly influenced by my own experience. Therefore, money has an essential role in our work behavior. Furthermore, earning high income makes you feel prouder of yourself and happier.
Likewise, when we are out of our workplaces we go to vacations, build homes , eat in restaurants and all of these depend on our lifestyle. Actually, our salary permits us to live the life we want. As we know everything in the world has price so do we. If we have high income we will choose better destinations for our trip and we will feel rested and much better after it ends. We can eat healthier food in order to have better health and this is one of the pillars in our lives thanks to our job.
So, as we see high salary is very immporatant in every aspect in our life. That is why I support the statement that with high salary people become more productive and secondly it is very important to fully enjoy the life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, firstly, furthermore, if, likewise, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1356.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 299.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53511705686 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44693686065 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555183946488 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.3370029154 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 75.3333333333 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6111111111 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61111111111 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182459739346 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0616522418197 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0502420711059 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11679305184 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0501807663028 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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