Some people think that the government should use extra money to fund programs to improve the environment. Others think that it is better for the government to spend money to support artistic programs.Which option do you prefer? Use specific reasons and ex

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Some people think that the government should use extra money to fund programs to improve the environment. Others think that it is better for the government to spend money to support artistic programs.
Which option do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

For mankind, we live on the Earth for many million years. Our quality of lives are directly depending on how good of the environment surrounding us. In my perspective, I believe that the government should subsidize green programs for their people benefits. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, environment is a part of human’s life where they interact with. If it is polluted, it can adversely affect to individual’s health and will harm their lives. Thus, if government fund programs that can protect the environment, the rate of sickness will drop and the number of causalities made by environmental problems will reduce. For instance, in my country, Bangkok was listed as the top three polluted city in the world in 2018 with the hazardous stage of air quality, so the number of sick people had increased tremendously last year. As a result, the government runs a program named Bring back Thai smile since January by which tons of trees were planted across Bangkok. Fortunately, according to news, they report a number of people with lung problems in Bangkok have been decreased compare to last year, and it can be seen that the program was very effective.
Secondly, improvement the environment can create opportunities for healthy economy in country. Many tourists around this world are seeking for splendid places for camping or enjoying the moment with nature. In fact, they do not want to go to places where are polluted. My family’s experience is a compelling example about this. About ten years ago, my family started the hotel business. At first it was went well because our town is one of the best place for camping and culture tourist in our country. However, we let tourists set fire camping without any restrictions, and these led to hazardous air pollution problem. A number of tourists decrease dramatically same as our income. Luckily, the government saw this problem and come to help our hometown by ran the green project and legitimate a law to constrain camping with fire. After that for six years, the air quality were back to normal, moreover, my home town was listed in a best air quality in our country. Consequently, our hotel has been fully booked until next year. Without a hand from the government, I might be starved
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that the government should fund the environmental or green projects. This is because it is a more serious issue that directly affect to people’s health and because a superb environment status cause to a healthy economy.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 80, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...any million years. Our quality of lives are directly depending on how good of the environment surround...
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Line 3, column 938, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...l, moreover, my home town was listed in a best air quality in our country. Conseq...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2151.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93348623853 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83632703917 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550458715596 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8405341957 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5217391304 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9565217391 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52173913043 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128185373751 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0380262499828 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0438304325938 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0932121227607 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0288846533548 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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