Some people think that the government should use extra money to fund programs to improve the environment. Others think that it is better for the government to spend money to support artistic programs. Which option do you prefer? Use specific reasons and e

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Some people think that the government should use extra money to fund programs to improve the environment. Others think that it is better for the government to spend money to support artistic programs. Which option do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In today’s turbulent world, it is very difficult for us to determine the best way to help the world. This sparks a controversial issue that how governments should allocate their budget. In this regard, some people believe that governments should raise funds for art programs. However, I go along with people who think that governments should spend money to protect our environment. Because the environmental issues affect the life of whole living creatures and also the private sectors are eager to raise funds for art projects.

We are certainly living in a society where the arts are severely underfunded. But, the environmental problems are turning to a vital issue which threatens the lives on our planet. The danger is so close that it not only jeopardize the lives of animals and plants but the lives of humans, as well. The recent bush firing in Australia is compelling evidence of this. The fire burned enormous areas that it has never happened before. By far, it is larger than the wildfire in Amazon and Los Angeles and the damages are so massive that it seems it is irreparable. Moreover, about half a billion animals including Kangaroos and Koalas have died. Because Australia is an isolated continent, it is the habitat of a huge diversity of floras and faunas that we cannot find them in other places of our planet. Therefore, the bush fire put all of them in danger of extinction. In addition, the fire killed many humans and forced them to leave their homes so they could save their lives. As a result, the environmental issues affect our lives significantly and for bringing it back to balance a lot of money is needed which only governments could afford.

Furthermore, humankind inherently has a vested interest in art and many people around the world tend to pay for artistic pieces. In addition, most of the time, the needed money to preserve the environment is so huge that individuals are not able to pay the expenses so, the government’s budget can only afford them. On the other hand, nowadays, art is a kind of commercial industry and in many cases it is lucrative, therefore, many people are eager to invest in art projects. Thus, they do not need governments' financial aids. For instance, the filmed entertainment industry makes fortunes annually and actors, actresses, directors, and etc. are among the wealthy people of their nations. As a result, the art is not in desperate need, in contrast, our environment is in a so poor condition that if we don’t fund to preserve it, we will face huge predicaments in not-so-distant future.

In conclusion, I argue in favor of the opinion that governments should allocate their budget for the environment. Because our future lives on Earth depends on keeping it in balance and also artists can convince the investors to raise the funds they need.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 366, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...stralia is compelling evidence of this. The fire burned enormous areas that it has ...
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Line 5, column 640, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...ually and actors, actresses, directors, and etc. are among the wealthy people of their n...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, kind of, as a result, in many cases, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2361.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91875 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83562943116 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502083333333 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 747.0 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1841522919 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.44 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.32 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208525721258 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0587212241446 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.074243656661 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14178686571 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0770430964873 0.0645574589148 119% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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