Some people think that hard work is the only way to achieve success, other think that luck is behind it, what opinion do you agree on?
Success is undoubtedly an endeavour of all humanity no matter who the person is or whose their cultural back ground or ideology is. Whether hard working is the best way to being successful in any arena of this life or luck is behind any accomplishment remains controversial. Some think luck is the main pillar, others reckon taking action is the realistic method to achieve any successful position. Personally, I champion the viewpoint of hardworking being the only way for fulfilling our goals successfully. There are two reasons that back up my position on this and I will be elaborating hereafter.
Basically, to achieve any goal we aspire we have to go through a pathway that usually ends up with us accomplishing what we long to. In other words, we there must be reasons behind any prosperity. A prime example on this is the recent renaissance which has been stablished in Turkey as a result of that great man, the President Erdoghan. Once he came on the scene in 2002, he set out a plan to bring about prosperity such as taking draconian measures against corruption in addition to encouraging education. Corrupted individuals have been removed from all the important positions in the administrative skeleton of the country, plus he had founded around 100 new universities and made education as of the Kinder Garden to the PHD level for free. As such, Turkey has skyrocketed to the top powerful economies in just few years as well as it has been ranked as one of the best countries worldwide education system wise. This true to life example shows that success requires actions to reach out.
What is more, luck means relying just on unexpected results without exerting any effort or laying out any plan to achieve ambitions. This is really counterproductive as it converts people into passive slackers who neglect their duties for the sake of waiting for any good fortune. This is really exemplified on by a cousin of mine who always was negligent at high school dues to believing in this standpoint, luck is of the essence to be bright in this life. That guy did not study properly, thus his learning attainment became seriously poor that ended up failing all his exams and eventually dropped out. Therefore, awaiting for anything positive to occur by chance without trying to going through the roads that drive us to such good result leads to failure in the wake of such a passiveness.
In conclusion, believing in luck leads to not working hard and consequently not being able to succeeding in this life. Hence, am against setting back daydreaming of my ambitions and not fulfilling its perquisites.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, hence, if, really, so, therefore, thus, well, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, in other words, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2171.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88963963964 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86134532945 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578828828829 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 672.3 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5839644656 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.263157895 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3684210526 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.89473684211 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164347755845 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0496650742792 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0686424685696 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104009218586 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0803927995599 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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