Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more
important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with
this point of view? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support
your answer.
The answer to this question can be differed from person to person. While some people are of the opinion that people should save land for endangered animals, others take an opposite point of view and believe that industry and farmland is more important. In no way could I agree with the latter point. There are some reasons, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin with, so destructive has extinction been that it has had a great number of positive effects on people's lives all over the world, yet above all, it can bring a great deal of sequential negative effect for people's lives because most animals and plants are rely on each other. Additionally, human beings can adopt themselves quickly to any change, but animal cannot adopt themselves to any change, and it is feasible that they become extinct easily. For example, last time, I was reading an article in the fields of agriculture. The author said that some nations used the chemical material to kill some birds because they damage their crops. After extinction of that type of birds, the volume of some particular worms which carries a dangerous virus had increased and brought them a plenty of problems, because these worms was the main sources of those birds. For this reason, had they not killed all of that birds, they could have prevent form increasing that worms which they carried disasters diseases.
The second debatable point is that on the one hand, some people believe that some of these animals are so dangerous for people and they killed a large number of people over time, yet one the other hand, some people believe that if government construct a fence around them, they can keep people from any dangerous situation, and also attract a great deal of tourists. Hence I strongly agree with the latter idea, for I do believe that the more government care about special animals, the more they can earn a hoard of money and provide more job opportunities for people. By way of illustration, based on the results of intelligible results which conducted in our country, approximately 90 percentage nations are earning a lot money by tourism attraction industry who are interested in endangered animals.
To make a long story short, no one can deny the enormous positive effects of saving land for endangered animals on economic growth. Not only are they able the preserve these animals for the next generation, but also they can eliminate a lot of probable problems due to extinction. Thus, I highly recommend that governments protects these animals because they bring them several lucrative consequences like what mentioned above and many others
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Suggestion: relied
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Message: Use past participle here: 'prevented'.
Suggestion: prevented
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... also attract a great deal of tourists. Hence I strongly agree with the latter idea, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, second, so, thus, while, for example, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2216.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93541202673 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55101665494 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518930957684 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 702.0 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.5655546357 48.9658058833 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.5 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0625 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5625 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206992732636 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0706949794992 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687981444791 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142275483025 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0665164516856 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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