Some people think that we should keep away from others to improve our relationship, because being away from people reminds us of how important they are. Others think we should always stay with others to have good relationship because we can communicate wi

I believe that humans are social beings who need to establish different relationships with others in order to survive and de successdul in their life and society. People have releations with varous groups such as family, friends, colleagues, and so on to sastisfy their required desires. Some people assert that they should keep away from others to improve their relationship, while I believe that for the purpose of enhancing relationship, people should stay with others to have a good relationship. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss my view using some reasons and examples.
I think in order to improve their relationships with others, people should stay in their relationship and communicate with them. if they stay away from others and do not communicate with them, they will forget each other over time, and their relationships will become faint. Therefore, it is better for people to preserve their relations with others and to be in touch with them so that they can improve their relations with them. for instance, one of my friends have stopped communicating with me for many years; thus, it has caused me to feel upset with her and to make other new friends.
Moreover, I think that individuals should continue their relations with others to improve it because it is possible that they need to each other’s help in difficult situations. If they are in contact with one another, they will able to assist each other. As a result, it will result in strengthening their relations; whereas, if they are far away from each other, they will not capable of aiding each other and thus they will not beneficail for one another.
To sum up, in my point of view, in order to improvement and development of realtions, people shoud stay with others and keep on communicationg with them bacause of the fact being far away others will cause them to forget each other and also they cannot help each other in different occasions.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...help each other in different occasions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, whereas, while, for instance, i think, such as, as a result, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1617.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 328.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92987804878 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7259285976 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463414634146 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 483.3 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.956021918 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.75 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3333333333 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.75 5.45110844103 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.410078016099 0.236089414692 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.188031095602 0.076458572812 246% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122281690347 0.0737576698707 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.288491278388 0.150856017488 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510307755335 0.0645574589148 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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