It is obvious that finding a proper job is one of the most important goals of people in their life. different factors affect choosing a job and people should consider their talents, abilities, academic degree, and so on when they are looking for a career. Some individuals prefer to select a major of study that would allow them to get a degree sooner so that they can start to work faster, while I believe that it is better for them to choose a major thet needs many years of study to get e degree which provide them with more job opportunities in the future. in the following paragraphs, I will discuss my view using some reasons and examples.
I think if people choose a major so that they get a degree sooner, they will have less employment opportunities than those who select a major that requires more yars of study to get a degree. Individuals who study more will learn more skills and have more knowledge in comaprison with people who study less years. Therefore, they will have access to more job opportunities and will be more successful in their future job. For instance, my friend decided to study a major at college for two years. Although she finish her studies sooner, she could not find a job and was forced to and continued her studies at university in order to get a better job in the future.
Moreover, I believe that people who study more are able to get a career that provide more money for them and match their interests. In other words, they will be satisfied with their job and will be more successful in their career. In addition, it will give the ma good opportunity to progress in their job and they will be achieve their objectives, whereas persons who study less will not able to get a suitable job with enough salary and will not enjoy their work. For example, I study my favorite major at university. although it would take me a great deal of time to finish my studies and get a degree, i could find a job just after my graduation and I has been satisfied with my job and has been able to make a lot of progress in my career.
To sum up, in my point of view, it is much beneficail for people to select a major of study that require more years of study. Although it would take them more time to graduate, they will have access to more employment opportunities and they would able to get a proper job with more money, security, and satisfaction.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, moreover, so, therefore, whereas, while, as for, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1942.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.43378995434 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46545744884 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.392694063927 0.524837075471 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.3669629381 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.375 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.375 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.3125 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233091388939 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0969021998263 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0870335564266 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171188028514 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0675656850083 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.71 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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