Some people think that we should keep away from others to improve our relationship, because being away from people reminds us of how important they are. Others think we should always stay with others to have good relationship because we can communicate with them more often. What do you think?
In my opinion, it would be better to stay always with others because they have more time for entertaining. Moreover, if you have a lot of people around you, you could get more help when you are in a problem.
First, people could do more entertainment when they are always together in comparison to when they aren’t. In other words, if you stay always with other people you could strengthen your relationship by doing more shared entertainment like going to the cinema, restaurants, football stadiums, etc. On the contrary, people who do not spend enough time with each other would probably have a cold relationship because they don’t have many common interests. As a result, by the passage of time, their distance with other people will increase. For example, when I was a student at university, I had a friend who believed that for maintaining his relationships with others, he shouldn’t go out with other students a lot. Thus, sometimes, although he hadn’t any specific plan, he didn’t spend time with other students. Consequently, after a while, his relationships with others become colder and colder because other students became more close together due to their shared memory. Indeed, they often talked about their entertainment in which he hadn’t any idea to share with them. Someday, I talked to him and convinced him that he should spend more time with others to improve his relationships. Also, I invited him to a friendly party. Thereby, he accepted my invitation and he decided to act according to my procedure and spend more time with other students to go to the cinema, concert, restaurants, etc. As a result, after a couple of months someday he came to me and thanked me because of my advice.
Second, being together leads to a better understanding of others’ difficulties. Thus, by helping other people to get rid of their difficulties you could improve your relationships. For instance, when I was working in a gas distribution project, I used to be always with my colleges because we were working together and after work time we were spending time with each other at the dorm. Thereby, we knew everything about our difficulties and helped each other to solve them. For example, once I needed some money to pass my debt, although I didn't tell anybody about my problem, he came to me and ask me why I was nervous. Therefore, after I told him about my problem, he gave me my required money immediately.
Based on the aforementioned reasons, it can be concluded that you can have better social relationships by spending more time with other people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 546, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... some money to pass my debt, although I didnt tell anybody about my problem, he came ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, as a result, in my opinion, in other words, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2165.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94292237443 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95296489448 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456621004566 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 679.5 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.51792114695 313% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1554764598 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.095238095 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8571428571 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.28571428571 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280573906555 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100176682451 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665439341816 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183506799036 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.028516781978 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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