Some young adult want independence from their parents as soon as possible.Some want to stay with them for a longer period of time.Which of these situation do yo think is better? Use Specific example and reason to support your position.
The notion of Independence really varies from person to person. While some might say that being free, doing whatever they like doing, and making own decisions as independence, some other person may view independence as differently. So, the idea of independence really subjective topic. Yes, some adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible while some may want to stay with them for a longer period of time. Personally, I like living with them for a longer period time cause that is the time in which they will need us the most.
First, we as a human being, talk a lot about returning the favor to someone who has done a lot for us. For instance, our mother nature: environment. If we have such a notion for other things of returning the favor then why cannot we have the same feeling for our own parents?. They are the people who gave their lives just to make our life beautiful and prosperous. Just lately, a friend of mine, who got out of his home to seek independence,called me and said that his mother was ill and was upset about the fact that he was not there when his mother, who was a single mother and did all she could to help her son thrive, needed him the most. He also mentioned the fact that had he been there for his mother, he would not have had to face such a day.
Second, we are a social animal, we need a company to stay mentally sound. In a case when we feel bored and likewise we tend to seek a company of friends. Why cannot we feel the same about our parents ?. They also need some company to keep them busy and contained. When the children live with their parents for a longer period of time then they will feel very relaxed cause they are just worried about us. If that worrying continues for a longer period of time, that can lead to a serious mental problem. For example, one of my friend, who was settled in abroad, heard the news that her father was admitted to hospital for developing a small tumor in his head, but nothing serious. She immediately came to her own country and started spending time with her father. The result was astonishing. Her father started to recover real quick and within 1 month of operation, he was normal.
Therefore, I suggest that every adult should live with their parents a little more than they think. Our parents think of us as of their only world, but we are unable to give us our small time. So, we must do the most from our side not just to fulfill our responsibility, but also to fulfill their dreams and wishes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
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Suggestion: , called
...got out of his home to seek independence,called me and said that his mother was ill and...
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...en live with their parents for a longer period of time then they will feel very relaxed cause ...
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
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...If that worrying continues for a longer period of time, that can lead to a serious mental prob...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, likewise, may, really, second, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2045.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.41684665227 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38506515284 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483801295896 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 635.4 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7707117705 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.2083333333 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2916666667 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.41666666667 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231510570183 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0728267995675 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0997384362274 0.0737576698707 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163160959174 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114735131231 0.0645574589148 178% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.36 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.9 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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