Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?

In my opinion, it is better for both children and parents if young adults lived with their parents for a longer time rather than seeking for independence at an earlier stage.

To begin with, it is unequivocally agreed that pre-adulthood is really a confusing phase of human life. People in this age group have to deal with lot of changes both physically, mentally and even socially in some cases. They have to make lot of decisions in various aspects of like college, major to take up, whether to attend an academic college or pursue an art like music, painting as a career and many such decisions. In this case, it would be definitely helpful for them if they are around their parents whom they could consult on these important decisions. On the other hand, it would be really stressful and presents a higher chance of making bad uninformed decisions just because of immaturity and lack of knowledge, since sometimes we may not know what is good and what is not. Additionally, living with parents poses lesser chances of people falling in prey to bad habits which is common at that age than living independently from their parents.

Further, in the case where people really want to pursue an experimental career or one of their passions as a career, it would be practically very difficult if such person has none but themselves to take care of the financials. As a result, many such people make sacrifices to their dream careers and take up more safe career. On the contrary, if they have the financial backing from their parents or family, it would have been easy for these people to pursue that dream path without worrying about failures. This even creates a sense of freedom and confidence which may result in higher chances of success too. To expand, if we consider the tuition fees of many colleges, it is on the expensive side and many students take up loans from banks for a considerable interest. This inevitably creates an abstract stress over the student about what might happen if they were unable to get a job with a decent pay and end up not paying the loan. This fear will avoid them from taking no major apart from the well established and career guaranteed ones even though their interests do not align with those majors. On the contrary, this would have been different had they had the financial support from their parents.

Having said this, we should also agree that being independent from families from an early age itself teaches the kids different aspects of life and brings about coping skills and prepares them for the life ahead.

To sum up, even though being independent from parents has its advantages, having parents around for a sufficient enough time provides mental support and financial security for a young adult.

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Average: 9 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, really, so, well, apart from, even so, as a result, in my opinion, in some cases, on the contrary, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2284.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 476.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79831932773 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48932471135 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523109243697 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 706.5 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.3751575718 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.352941176 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.52941176471 5.45110844103 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279486626651 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0907420971801 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0924092656478 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190308002864 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101759839068 0.0645574589148 158% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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