Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?
independence is essential to be person very responsible and mature. people may have different perspective regarding the subject of the independence. some people may like to be independence from their parents while some like to be tied with their parents. In my view, i like the way orf independence as soon as people think they can live independently because it helps the person be robustto tackle the problem in their life and the other hand they become free to live the life they want.
if people become independent from the earlier times they have a lot of experience about the life. they kmow how to deal in the particular situation, how to avoid the problems and as a whole it makes a person perfect to live when there is no one to help them in their difficult times. On the other hand, the person who lives with their family, barely tackle the problems face to face. they lose their chance to learn a skill of struggling. Top of the all, they becomes more vulnerable when they have to face a problem but their memeber of the family is nomore. I know it is bitter truth of the fact but we haver to live with it. To be strong or beome unflappable in the terrible situation, we should leave our family.
sometimes, independence is essential to horn the skill we have. family is always a strong and weakness of the person at the same times. Individual hardly can do the things what they think is good for them especially due to the family restriction or the family situation. if they come out from the roof of the family, they will explore the hoirizon of their skill. For instance, my brother has immense interest in the field of the art but he could not practice out because my father thought it would not best for him. he continously admonished my father to stop the art and persuade him to join in the endineering. At last, my brother left the home and pursued in the art career. Thankfully, he have done very well in the art and established himself as a fine artist. So, sometimes people should be independence to become something meaningful in their life.
In conclusion, independence is very essential for the personal; growth and development. if we embraced it, certainly in our life it will matter extensively.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, regarding, so, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1831.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6120906801 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67278266431 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48362720403 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 585.9 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0799121704 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.2272727273 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0454545455 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.54545454545 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210252236038 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0596397556156 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0546432158676 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125797653912 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0573611357302 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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