Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your own opinion.
Responsibility and commitment are the key factors of becoming an independent person. In order to live apart from our parents, we have to acknowledge how to take care for ourselves. In my opinion, the youth should have independence as soon as they acknowledge responsibility, commitment, and planning.
To begin with, people, who live alone, have a better understanding of budget planning. Since they possess a fixed amount of money each month, they have to learn to distribute their money correctly. For example, as an international student, my friend counts her income and spent money. She sometimes restricts to treat herself (buy a new outfit or spend a day in a SPA salon) in order to pay for bills and groceries. Furthermore, living alone means that we must follow our timetable that includes studies, house works, and hobbies. Since in a day we have only 24 hours, we must spend that time wisely and productively.
To continue, young people, who live with their family, are usually more dependent on their families. Due to the fact that parents have been caring for us for many years, we seem to them as if innocent children. However, living alone is one method for most of us to show them our maturity and personal growth. By solving problems without parents’ intervention most of us become independent and reliable people.
We cannot deny that living with parents has such advantage as boosting cooperation and unity between members of the family. However, what we fail to realize that people who are independent tend to learn basic life skills more efficiently and make the right decision on their own than people who are under the protection of their families.
In conclusion, it is extremely beneficial to young adults live independently from a young age. It provides them with a better understanding of their duties and responsibilities and helps them to plan not only time but also their budget.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, apart from, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1632.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 320.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96645191401 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59375 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.559386054 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.8 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26666666667 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236024664684 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737620359594 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634513443639 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142217942808 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0699676101885 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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