As a student of university that has a long break between university semesters, the university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break:
(1)students must take a course on the subject that has no direct connection to their majors of study.
(2)students must volunteer to work in the city where the university is located or their hometowns to improve some aspects of life of the city or their own town.
which one do you think is more beneficial for students in their university. Why?
One month break is very valuable for students because they can learn a lot during these days. As far as I am concerned, I think taking a course on the subject that has no direct connection to students’ majors of study is more beneficial for students.
First, since lots of students did not figure out what they are interested in and what they are good at before entering universities, this is a good chance for these students to find or learn something that they are really interested in. For example, students are able to take classical music courses, art history courses and stuff like that. In this case, students could know better about themselves than before. After studying for a moth, they know clearly about what they are actually want to learn in the university and what they want to do in the future. Therefore, if they are no satisfied with their current major, they can changes their major as soon as the beginning of the next semester. But if they just do some work in the city or in their hometowns, they cannot find out that their major is not suitable for them. Maybe they will very regret in one day. Therefore, the first choice is much better for students.
Second, although students can do some volunteer work in the city and students’ hometowns to develop some aspects of life of the city or their own town, these jobs might be a great burden for students. For instance, they may need to be exposed to the sun for a long time to finish the tasks. Besides, in order to do a good job, students have to stand for 8 or more hours to do various work which will definitely make them very tired. Even worse, they may get injured or sick because of these exhausted jobs. It is sure that the university does not want to see these kinds of outcomes. On the contrary, students will feel more comfortable when they study other courses in the classrooms than doing jobs. Therefore, it is obvious that students can gain more advantages from the first option than the second option.
As the two reasons mentioned above, it is easy to draw conclusion that the first option will be way more beneficial for students than the second option.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 488, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'wanted'.
Suggestion: wanted
...ow clearly about what they are actually want to learn in the university and what the...
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Line 5, column 631, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'change'
Suggestion: change
...fied with their current major, they can changes their major as soon as the beginning of...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, but, first, if, may, really, second, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1784.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62176165803 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42330476223 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502590673575 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5178294365 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1111111111 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4444444444 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77777777778 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267265654886 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0905042296944 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627566379779 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187463756362 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0988130862377 0.0645574589148 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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