Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
Many would say that instructors make the most considerable impacts on students. In some sense, it might be the case because authorities of teachers are powerful than that of peer students, which enables teacher collect student's misbehavior. Teachers easily control their students with school's regulations and rules. However, I still disagree with the given statement that students are more significantly influenced by their teachers than by their friends, and the reasons are as below.
First of all, students tend to open to their friends' advice, and the advice is often accurate than advice from teachers. With in-depth understanding, friends can give useful and best-suited advice that students need. This advice causes fundamental changes how students act because it is highly possible to fit well in their situations. On the other hand, teachers who have few chance to have deep conservation with their students cannot give proper advice. For instance, when I was a high school student, I did not understand why I have to study because I want to be a chef. Although all of my teachers made me to study harder, I thought all of advice is just obsolete. One day, one of my friends whose dream was a dance-singer told me in earnest that he studies to prepare unexpected events in the future and advised me to study harder for sure. As a result, his sincere advice moved my mind and I started to get interested in studies, which could never had been done by teachers.
Moreover, friends can influence broader aspects of life than teachers do. During spending whole days inside and outside of a classroom, the young tend to mimic their friends' life style, hobbies, and any other habits in daily life as well as their behaviors in classroom. For example, when I was a middle school student, I had a friend who was very diligent. She woke up early in the morning, did regular exercises, and did not procrastinate what she had to do. I was totally different from her, being lazy and languish. However, I started to learn from her and tried to emulate her life cycle and finally succeed. In this regard, friends affect students in every aspects of life, which can not be done by teachers who spend limited time with their students during the classes.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that friends affect students more than teachers do. Students spend many time with their friends and their teachers. As a result, there are more chances to observe friend's behavior which is worth to follow and get a sincere advice from them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun chance seems to be countable; consider using: 'few chances'.
Suggestion: few chances
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'many times'.
Suggestion: many times
...s more than teachers do. Students spend many time with their friends and their teachers. ...
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Message: Did you mean 'changes'?
Suggestion: changes
...r teachers. As a result, there are more chances to observe friends behavior which is wo...
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Line 13, column 246, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'sincere advice'.
Suggestion: sincere advice
...havior which is worth to follow and get a sincere advice from them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, moreover, so, still, well, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2106.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8976744186 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5875643864 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509302325581 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.1012136203 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7272727273 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5454545455 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.31818181818 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.417738212976 0.236089414692 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130950138503 0.076458572812 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.142643022444 0.0737576698707 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.307518782016 0.150856017488 204% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131135414417 0.0645574589148 203% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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