Nowadays, students are associating with clubs in order to help people voluntarily. In this regard, there are several ways to support people, such as helping students with reading and mathematics, building houses for people how do not have shelters, and visiting elderly people. When it comes to me choosing one of the recent ways, I select the third one, and I think that helping to the old people is the best choice to assist others. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
First of all, students listen to old people’s life stories and utilize these experiences in their own lives. To be more specific, elderly people are an enormous source of worthwhile experiences. They are involved in different situations in their lives; therefore, they have a long story to share with pupils. Additionally, the students can attend to their companions and enhance their quality of life by using these valuable experiences. Perhaps my personal experience may shed more light on this matter. Two years ago, I planned to visit elderly people one day a week. On the first day, I saw a woman who seemed to be depressed. When I talked to her, I realized that she did not have any child, and she advised me to have children because they are life’s happiness. Her experiences are always repeated in my mind, and I should say that I have one child and now know her words deeply because my child has made my life more pleasant.
Secondly, students learn to respect and take care of their parents when they are old. To elucidate, older people always complain that their children threw them out and did not care about them. They believe that parents love their children and help them at all times. While the children do not appreciate parent’s efforts. With these in mind, students become familiar with old people’s difficulty and their expectations. As a result, the students will realize their parent’s pivotal role in their lives and admire them in the best way.
In conclusion, with all this taken into account, I believe that assisting old people is the best selection to help people. This is not only because the students gather worthy experiences, but also they understand that they should help parents in their old period.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, while, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1855.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8687664042 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57851541433 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524934383202 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.1711743172 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3333333333 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1428571429 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260705506661 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0827588396292 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0728808441972 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186932249305 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0815408944561 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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