Nowadays, people are attempting to achieve their goals during life all over the world. In this regard, some persons believe that success is not the most important thing, and it is essential to remain happy and optimistic when we fail, while others hold the opposite supposition. When it comes to me, I concur with the latter group, stating that success is more important than remaining happy in failures. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint with two specific reasons.
First of all, people know us with our achievements rather than our mood when we fail. To be more specific, individuals try hard to reach their goals and desires with significant effort. In this vein, they face a lot of failures in the path of being successful, but other people do not see and realize the amount of their endeavors and mood throughout the route. Because people admire somebody's success, not their attitude in failures, being prosperous is more critical than remaining hopeful and happy in difficulties.
Secondly, successes remain vivid in our memory and brain during lifetime rather than our feeling in failures. To elucidate, when a person does a great amount of work in order to reach his or her goal and faces difficulties, nothing special remains in his or her brain because these efforts and moments are usually boring and sad. On the other hand, when some individual reaches a desirable goal in his or her life, this is a fantastic event and happening, which easily remain in memory. My personal experience may shed more light on this matter. When I decided to enter a master's degree, I had to take an exam. In the first year, I could not get the goal, and my score in the exam could not reach the minimum score required for university. After this failure, I tried to be happy and set the other goal in order to enter the university, and after one year, I reached my desire. When I am thinking about those two years of my life, I remember the successful event of entering graduate school rather than my optimistic feelings.
In conclusion, with all this taken into account, I firmly believe that it is more important to be successful, and it is not more crucial to remain optimistic when we fail. Not only do people know us based on our achievements, but also successful moments stay in our memory with more details.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 2, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...wpoint with two specific reasons. First of all, people know us with our ac...
^^^
Line 6, column 2, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...opeful and happy in difficulties. Secondly, successes remain vivid in our ...
^^^
Line 8, column 2, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...her than my optimistic feelings. In conclusion, with all this taken into ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2017.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90754257908 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76971153183 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513381995134 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1553001116 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.055555556 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8333333333 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354191632562 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114720605194 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11793057359 0.0737576698707 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263811319222 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125280057597 0.0645574589148 194% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.