It is useful for students to use their break time effectively. Students can do different activities according to their abilities and interests. I strongly believe that volunteering to contribute to life of city would be more beneficial for students than raking a course in university. In the following paragraphs I will discuss my view using some reasons and examples.
I think working in environment outside of the university would be good experience for students. It will give them a great opportunity to get valuable experience in different areas. For instance, when I was a student in university, i taught high school’s student English language which would be helpful for me because I planned to be a teacher in the future.
Moreover, participating in activities off-campus not only benefits students themselves but also improves k life in city. Taking a course only helps students learn more about other subject, whereas trying to contribute to affairs associated the city helps the society. For example, my friend volunteered to volunteered to take part in a group activity in order to teach children in elementary school how to help to clean their environment which will be useful their health. They went public places and parks and gathered waste materiala which were harmful for environments. As a result, their work had significant effects on improve the conditions of city and cleaned the city.
To sum up, volunteering to work in different field outsider the university is much better for students rather than taking course irrelevant to their majors of study. It will be valuable experience for student’s future job and also has positive influence on city and society
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, whereas, for example, for instance, i think, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1425.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 273.0 407.700716846 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21978021978 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01573558831 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578754578755 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4646482142 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.785714286 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253441257959 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0911079163741 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0622254893293 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16974069301 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433949626816 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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