Students of a university have a long break between university semesters; the university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break:
1. Students must take a course on the subject that has no direct connection to their majors of study (For example, a student majoring in engineering may take course in fine arts or social science.)
2. Students must volunteer to work in the university’s city or their hometowns to improve some aspects of life of the city or their own town. (For example, students may help local primary school children with their homework.) Which one do you think is more beneficial for students in their university? Why? Give detailed examples and reasons. Use your OWN words, do NOT use memorized examples.
It is indeed undeniable that students would like to do the tasks that benefit them. Although some of my friends believe that different course can help them in many aspects, but from my vantage point, the students benefit being the volunteer to work in the university’s city or their hometown. Not only can it be a work experience for them, but also it benefits the society. I subscribe in this way which I will illustrate in the following reason.
The first exquisite point to mention is that this work can be work experience for the students. When they do some jobs such as teaching assistant or teaching for several days to the students who need some improvements, it will be an experience. Even, they will put this experience in their CVs. Moreover, this experience can help students in the similar positions. Therefore, they can exploit from their experience in order to do well their jobs. Students can make the relationship with people from their own cities that may be helpful in finding jobs for the students after their graduation. A vivid example can be shed light on this subject is my own experience. I experienced the same event and I remember I made an appropriate relationship with one of the managers of the high-school. Consequently, I was able to continue as a teacher in the summer when the university was off. It was also the review of the notions that I had learned for me that I could use in my later classes. By those classes, I was taught that how to behave in the class and how to be efficient.
Another reason that deserves some words is that the society can benefit it. First off, the students of schools can be improved in learning the materials of their lessons. They also will be familiar with the university students and consequently, with the university programs. Therefore, they will be motivated in their studies. Moreover, the value of the university among people of the society will increase with this work. Not only will the university be respected among people, but also the students and consequently, the science and increasing knowledge will be value. Going back to the above example. After that action my university did, in the next year, there were lots of applications for undergraduate courses. Therefore, some outstanding students were entered to our university. Actually, this valuable action worked to our university.
All in all, I assert that students are better to participate in some volunteer works in the light of the aforementioned reasons. Because it benefits not only the students but also the university and the society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ut also the university and the society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2149.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89521640091 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8665686038 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451025056948 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 667.8 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.6934365251 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.6538461538 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8846153846 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42307692308 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235461464152 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0720061952858 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582544060596 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174828447734 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0270576305094 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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