#TOEFL #iBT November 5, 2016
University students are often encouraged to study fields in which significant job growth (a large increase in job opportunities) is expected; these fields currently include science, technology, engineering, and math, do you believe students should consider studying fields related to these subjects even if they are more interested in other subjects? Why or why not?
It is indeed undeniable that making money is a more important factor to be successful in life. Although some of my friends are conservative and think that money and job are essential in choosing a university major, from my vantage point, to be interested in a subject is the most prominent factor for the students to study that field at the university. Not only can they be successful in their university studies, but also they will be able to find an appropriate job related to their major. I subscribe this way which I will illustrate in the following essay.
The first exquisite point to mention is that if the students are interested in their fields, they will pay special attention to their courses. Whenever they are in the classrooms, they concentrate every material that the professors present. It is clear that every student is aware of all the materials and notions of a course, s/he will obtain the best score in that course. The students of a course can’t understand every detail of course unless they love that course and their majors. A vivid example can be shed light on this subject is my own experience. Unlike my friends and classmates, I was interested in my major and consequently, I was trying to concentrate all the notions and definitions of the class, and as a result, I had the best marks. I chose my major in the situation that most of my high-school teachers, actually, had warned that your chosen major is not so practical, while I made my decision according to my own interests. In fact, to be interested caused me to get the best results in every course.
Another reason that deserves some words is that those who are interested in their majors will find their jobs. In my view, they are so motivated in doing jobs and finding a position that they love. According to the above reason, since they have the best performance at the university and as result, they will be qualified in applying positions which are relevant to their university majors, though the positions of that major may be less than the major. I remember that due to my excellent performance, at the university, I was accepted in most positions that I had applied. Even, I didn’t search so much for the variety of jobs and positions, however, I was qualified in my first applications.
To make long story short, I assert that to be interested in one major is more prominent in choosing a university major in the light of the aforementioned reasons. Actually, having a satisfying performance at the university and finding job are its main reasons to behave in this way. Therefore, the interest factor is more important.
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It is indeed undeniable that making mone...
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...ill illustrate in the following essay. The first exquisite point to mention is ...
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...get the best results in every course. Another reason that deserves some words ...
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...as qualified in my first applications. To make long story short, I assert that ...
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... the interest factor is more important.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, while, in fact, of course, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 15.1003584229 212% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2173.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75492341357 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83093653198 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446389496718 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 688.5 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0284749034 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.65 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.85 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0600984780192 0.236089414692 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0215137370442 0.076458572812 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0293910227075 0.0737576698707 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0451112207274 0.150856017488 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.027678414966 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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