University students are often encouraged to study fields in which significant job growth (a large increase in job opportunities) is expected; these fields currently include science, technology, engineering, and math, do you believe students should consider studying fields related to these subjects even if they are more interested in other subjects? Why or why not?
No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that choosing a proper major in the university plays a prominent role in each individual’s life. In fact, making a decent decision on this matter would completely change the path of life and could be a turning point in every body’s life, in terms of making progress in the profession, avoiding from being tedious in the work environment, and so forth. Although some people believe that each person should only choose the field of study in which they want to start at the university according to job growth, I have a different point of view. As far as I am concerned, in order for students to be prosperous in their major, they should be able to opt their favorite field of study in which they are passionate, due to a number of reasons, two of which are of great importance in comparison to others, which are elaborated upon hereunder.
The first and probably the most important reason to be mentioned is that all of the students should pursue their interests. Chasing interests in life not only would cause making progress in works, but also results in an internal satisfaction additionally. To shed light on this matter, I want to mention an example of my personal experience. Before going to university, I was passionate about photography. Every day and in most of the situations I was going out with a couple of my friends to take photos. My photos were chosen for exhibitions in numerous art galleries. After a while, my parents compelled me to choose Civil engineering as my major in university. Since I was not aware of the disadvantages of this decision, I obeyed and enrolled in it. After six terms of studying, I found out that I was in the wrong way. Thus I withdrew and started again to study photography. Now I am working in one of the most prestigious advertising companies in my city with a high salary. In fact, now I have both the internal satisfaction in addition to a rapid progression in my career.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that people feel tedious in work when they choose a major in which they are not interested in. In fact, all of us spend most of our time in the working environment. Having a lot of affection is the stepping-stone for having a pleasant working environment. Sense of estrangement than their major cause to various mental diseases such as depression and insomnia. Based on a recently revealed research by an authentic institute in my country in the field of psychology, it shows despite the fact that people find a position much more faster than those who chase their interests, there is a high correlation between higher rates of depression and working without any interest. Indeed, they sacrifice their whole life, since they don’t want to take a risk and accept the fact that the quality of their whole life is dependent on pursuing their interests.
To make a long story short, one can conclude that because of my personal experience and the noteworthy research in this field, students should chase their favorite major and be assured that this is the only way of success. We only live once, why should we waste our lives by making a wrong choice?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, then, thus, while, in addition, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 98.0 52.1666666667 188% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2630.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 558.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71326164875 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86024933743 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80328215175 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492831541219 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 829.8 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.5756310494 48.9658058833 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.583333333 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.08333333333 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106695715074 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0272778826338 0.076458572812 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0512279009074 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0728096558121 0.150856017488 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0556637424162 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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