The government can take a variety of actions to help protect the environment. Which one of the following do you think is the most important for the nation’s government to take to protect the environment?
1. Fund research to develop environmentally friendly energy sources such as solar and wind energy.
2. Preserve the natural places like forests and protect the animals that live there.
3. Enforce laws to prevent the pollution of air and water by large companies.
In this complicated world where lots of pollution has been produced by the fume
and other reminded material of the large company caused to be concentrated the
preserving of the environment. There are lots of benefits in the second and third
options, but from my vantage point, the fund research can help even more than the
others. Not only can the fund research help the preserving of the environment
appropriately, but also it helps come up new idea to create new healthier source of
energy. I feel the first option is the best due to couple of reasons which I will
explore in the following essay.
The first exquisite point to mention is that the fund research can help protect the
environment. I would like to explain that fund research and consequently
developing natural science may exploit to preserve the environment. All majors in
natural science such as environmental science, biology, chemistry, physics and
even mathematics have some results to remain the environment healthier. In
environmental science major, we can study the whole of our environment to
provide some information about it so we are able to know about the environment
and how its situation is. In another major like biology, we can use our science in
biology to know about some special species in our environment. And we even can
predict the situation of the environment in the future so that we can be more aware
to conserve it. A vivid example can be shed light on the subject is my own
experience. My thesis in PhD was about the numerical analysis of the diameter
changing of some polar ices. With lots of the measurements and gathering data, I
could illustrate that the speed of melting polar ice has been increased in recent
years which is so dangerous to our environment. I think the fund allocated to my
PhD research helped me obtain the environmental conclusion.
Another reason that deserves some words is that the fund research can help find
new source of energy which is not so dangerous to the environment. Finding the
new source of energy other than burning fossilized fuel can help environment
effectively. Moreover, it prevents to heathen the earth more. Using Fossil fuels
energy is the main factor of the global warming so finding new source of energy is
essential. Also inventing and building the some mechanical machines and other ilk
which waste less energy. Those finding new source of energy and building
appropriate useful machines can be possible with focusing and studying the science
related to these issues and funding them in order to obtain suitable conclusion. I
remember my friend at his MSc time invented a set that was being used the waves
of the sea to produce electricity. And I remember the university supported his idea
completely. My friend’s idea tended to a good result with a university financial
supports.
To make long story sort, I can say that funding to natural science and also
funding to find a new source of energy can help conserve the environment better.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'consequently', 'first', 'may', 'moreover', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'third', 'i feel', 'i think', 'in fact', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.248628884826 0.229887763892 108% => OK
Verbs: 0.160877513711 0.158761421928 101% => OK
Adjectives: 0.102376599634 0.0866891130778 118% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0347349177331 0.046263068375 75% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0566727605119 0.0685040099705 83% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0987202925046 0.118717715034 83% => OK
Participles: 0.0383912248629 0.0351676179071 109% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.80692095678 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0402193784278 0.0309702414327 130% => OK
Particles: 0.0018281535649 0.00188951952338 97% => OK
Determiners: 0.109689213894 0.0887237588012 124% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0310786106033 0.0209618222197 148% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0146252285192 0.0139019557991 105% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3023.0 2387.08602151 127% => OK
No of words: 508.0 408.028673835 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.95078740157 5.86048508987 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.48200974243 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.340551181102 0.338922669872 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.267716535433 0.251872472559 106% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.181102362205 0.174417080927 104% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.116141732283 0.112833075102 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80692095678 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470472440945 0.524397521467 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 54.5386687047 59.2087087015 92% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6684587814 116% => OK
Sentence length: 21.1666666667 20.5533526081 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4021545247 48.84282405 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.958333333 120.699889404 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1666666667 20.5533526081 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.583333333333 0.644075263715 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 38.0 4.5376344086 837% => There are something wrong with the essay format.
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 47.93832021 45.7405998639 105% => OK
Elegance: 1.52898550725 1.45489161554 105% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.448991688122 0.300154397459 150% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.145048477662 0.103427244359 140% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0921610208394 0.0752933317313 122% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.720572563255 0.497263757937 145% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.305267890408 0.151897553556 201% => Sentences are changing often in a paragraphs.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.200227919124 0.114077575197 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0866170869465 0.0781384742642 111% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.121018655927 0.336927656856 36% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0833238867965 0.067059652881 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163263363506 0.210909579961 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0900728793585 0.0618886996521 146% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8870967742 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 13.0 8.42114695341 154% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.4623655914 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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