TOEFL iBT October 28, 2016.
Do you agree or disagree? It is better to use your own knowledge and experience to solve problems than to ask other people for advice.
At this complicated world, it is indeed undeniable to solve every problem solely by ourselves. Everybody has its own idea and, every point has its own benefits but, from my vantage point, we can exploit others’ experience and knowledge appropriately. Not only can we solve our problems in a fast way, but also it is possible to gain additional knowledge which can be useful in the next time. In what follows, I will aptly substantiate my viewpoint.
The first exquisite point to mention is that with the help of the others’ experience we can solve our problems as soon as possible and, consequently we will have minimum wasting time. This help, in my view, does not mean to solve the problem completely by the others’ direction. Actually, we can exploit the other’s guidance even with one tiny keyword. Therefore, we are able to solve the problems fast, but also we increased our abilities in solving different problems. A vivid example on this subject is my own experience. When I finished my undergraduate, I was eager to continue my education in graduate, but I didn’t how to find and how to apply for an appropriate school. My friend was a successful candidate in one of the graduate school, said to me, you can analyze the university admission web sections and, also some universities have also job vacancies section that you can find some PhD positions there. My friend doesn’t find me any graduate position, but actually, he gave me some critical keywords that persuade me how to search for my problem on the internet.
Another reason that deserves some words is that it is possible to gain extra knowledge and additional tricks which can be useful for us in the next time. Sometimes, we can solve a problem, and we know how to get the result but, maybe there is another way that we can use that way when our solution is not viable. Therefore, asking another solution will enable us to be equipped more in facing the problems. Again in the above example, I remember I spoke with another my friend and he advised me about graduate education in another way. In fact, he persuaded me to think broadly about applying for the universities abroad. Although I knew that how to apply, but I didn’t consider the universities in abroad. He advised me to find the universities and how to be aware of their rank and how to decide in the best way. Finally, I could make my best decision with the help of my friends’ advisements.
To make long story short, I assert that using others’ experience has lots of benefits in the light of the aforementioned reasons. Not only will we be able to get an appropriate result fast, but we also gain extra useful information. Therefore, how can we ignore the others’ experience and knowledge?
Grammar and spelling errors:
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At this complicated world, it is indeed ...
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...ely. Not only can we solve our problems in a fast way, but also it is possible to gain additi...
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... will aptly substantiate my viewpoint. The first exquisite point to mention is ...
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...s and, also some universities have also job vacancies section that you can find som...
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...earch for my problem on the internet. Another reason that deserves some words ...
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...help of my friends' advisements. To make long story short, I assert that ...
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... others' experience and knowledge?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, finally, first, if, may, so, therefore, in addition, in fact, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2301.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81380753138 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91774110898 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.44769874477 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 744.3 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1901716057 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.043478261 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7826086957 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65217391304 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140453931396 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0503369382934 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0387675479063 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107510772792 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0301826070899 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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