technology has made children less creative than children in the past. Do you agree or disagree?
In the modern world rapid development of technology affect to the society in good aspects as well as bad aspects. With the develpment children used techology more than in past. personally, I believe that this high tech activities caused to create more creative child than he or she may in past. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, with development of technical field, all most all the students have access to the internet. With availability of internet students can learn lot of new things and new theories vey easily. before the few decades, the students need to go to libraries or they have to buy books to help their academics works, but now student can access these books and buy these books very easily. when this knowledge is free, it will encourage students to create new inovations than before. The example from reasearch fields such as science can bolster this claim. In the past most inovations happen without learning from the past experiences, because unavailability of informations. example like eye glasses found by chineese and europeans in the same period without knowing each other. If this two people could interact with each other one party could be spend that time to create more inovative thing. Therefore, with this example we can conclude that with the access to internet make more creative people than in the past.
Secondly, technology innovations made life easy. children in the past have spent more time to travelling or helping thier parents with the day today works. however, with the development of fast electrical trains, highways and developed roads might help childern to come home very fastly than before. With availability of more time leads to make creative peoples since they have free time slots to experiment new things. my personal experience is compelling exaple for this. when I was a student my school is far away from my hometown, which take almost two hours to travel from home. In this time I have no time to do or think about new things since I feel very tired after long travelling time. however, when I am in final years at school our government construct new highway path and because of that I can tarvel to home within one hour or less. With this, I get more free time and in that time I began to build small robots and that knowledge is helped me lot in the future.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that technology development make more creative younger generation than past. this is because chances to access free knowlege with internet and this development save our time to think creatively.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2181.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8574610245 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53288254184 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510022271715 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 672.3 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.3369675021 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.875 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7083333333 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.20833333333 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141809639628 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0488331508512 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0651783861581 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109107369894 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0466442025592 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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