“When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success.” Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.
People have succeeded in their lives in several ways, and we always wonder how they did it. Personally, I believe that success depends on our hard work. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, success is the result of hard work over a long time period. success happens gradually with correct decisions and dedications. In contrast, luck is one time event, which may cause short term success but not the long term success. The experience of my friend, who is an entrepreneur is a compelling example of this. he started his business as a startup company with a small number of employees to produce one type of product to the market. when the product became popular, he achieved his success by introducing new products and increasing the size of the business. His company grew from a very small company to a large firm in the industry and supplied many job opportunities to people. while my friend has been lucky at one stage of his company growth, the long term success depends on hard work and commitment towards the business.
Secondly, success is a result of careful planning and research and development, to achieve maximum output from the employees. The business should plan to achieve short term goals while achieving long term success. For instance, as the owner of the business, my uncle spent more money on planning and research about the market. because of this investment, his company could produce goods to fulfil customer satisfaction and therefore company assured the early success. However, some may think that customer attracted to products because of my uncles' fortune, when we analyse closer about the business we can see that number of months spent on research about the market environment caused to attract more customers. therefore, success entirely depends on hard work on strategic planning and research rather than good fortune.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that success comes as a result of hard work. this is because success takes a lot of time, and also required careful planning and research and development
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1775.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 351.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05698005698 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62947374782 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524216524217 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8911260691 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4210526316 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4736842105 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.73684210526 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150823885791 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0556889503439 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0427768688357 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0971741711476 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0270281614992 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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