Many people think about how to succeed. Some people say working hard is the way to succeed and some people think luck will lead to success. However, I strongly think that working hard is the only way to succeed. I will tell you two reasons to support my opinion.
First, you can see through the successful people. For example, Kim Yu-na skater, when she was young, she could not play and practiced all day. She tried nonstop until her feet were filled with wounds. Except for Kim Yu-na, there are so many people who work hard and succeed, such as Park Jisung soccer player, IU .Therefore, she eventually became a world figure star. On the other hand, there is no one that becomes successful through luck. I saw the news that someone had killed each other in their family after winning the lottery.
Second, if you work hard working the luck will come to you. Many people think the world is unfair. However, the world is so fair. If you are lazy, you can not get something that you want, but if you work hard, the world will support you and give you luck too.For example, the school sister who I know studied every day by planning every minute. In the end, she went to the best university, she said it is luck, but I saw how hard she worked, so I think it is luck to the person who works hard. Therefore, luck follows only when efforts are based.
There is absolutely nothing you can get for free. Successful people are not a goal to success, they just live their lives hard and then they are on the road to success. I will do my best in my current life and work hard too.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, except for, for example, i think, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 52.1666666667 44% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1284.0 1977.66487455 65% => OK
No of words: 295.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.35254237288 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.0452901312 2.67179642975 77% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528813559322 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 379.8 618.680645161 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.7452844621 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.5789473684 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5263157895 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28345518843 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0866177955745 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520612113958 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175660060759 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0341453578089 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.8 11.7677419355 58% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 58.1214874552 140% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.1575268817 55% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.65 10.9000537634 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.79 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 86.8835125448 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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