In our lives, there are many ways to understand the people and the world, such as reading books and traveling. I think traveling is the best way to learn about the world. I will tell you two reasons to support my opinion.
First, traveling can learn the world directly. If we travel, we meet various people; try another culture and eat various traditional foods. On the other hand, reading books, we do not feel it, we do not taste it and we do not experience it. Especially, to know the world, traveling is the most suitable because you have to go there and experience difficulties and meet many people. Before, when I saw France in a book, I did not realize it very well, but when I saw it directly, I was so surprised at how beautiful and colorful it was. Also, I could see the kindness of people that I could never know in the book.
Second, the book resembles only the author’s personal opinion. The books we usually read are many books described by one writer. Naturally, the writer’s thoughts and feelings resemble the book. Therefore, it makes us feel the places very vividly, but it is hard to fully learn the world through books. It is because each person feels and thinks differently.
LIke this, traveling is the best way to learn about various people and the world. It is because traveling is very direct and the book just has personal thoughts. Traveling is a lot of bother, but it is a lot to gain.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 46, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'opinion'.
Suggestion: opinion
...d, the book resembles only the author’s personal opinion. The books we usually read are many boo...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t of bother, but it is a lot to gain.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, well, i think, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 52.1666666667 38% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1173.0 1977.66487455 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 258.0 407.700716846 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54651162791 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49529633829 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 212.727598566 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542635658915 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 350.1 618.680645161 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.1984210958 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.0 100.406767564 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1764705882 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05882352941 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228747614072 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0759044208035 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472077225617 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152464205141 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0575246804884 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.52 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.89 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 86.8835125448 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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