“When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success.” Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.
I disagree with the statement. To be more specific, I think that luck has a lot to do with success due to the thee reasons mentioned below.
First, success means having an ideal job to most adults, and people who are lucky enough to be born in a wealthy family have a better chance to succeed than those who were born in a poor family. For instance, I have a friend called Jammy who is born in an affluent family. To be more specific, he is the son of a famous IT company’s CEO. Consequently, he plays video games all the day and joins different parties every week. Besides, he only studies three hours per week. Yet, since his father is the CEO, after his father retired, he will definitely be the next CEO of the company. Hence, it is obvious that people who are born in a prestigious family have a better chance to succeed without paying too much effort.
Secondly, success means attending a good college to students, and people who are lucky enough to avoid tragedy when taking the exam have a higher probability to succeed. Take my friend Jane as an example. Jane studied for eight to ten hours every day because she wanted to become a doctor. However, she got a flu during the college entrance exam. Consequently, she performed extremely terrible in her exam. As a result, she could only enter an average university. Nonetheless, my cousin Chris was lucky in his exam. To be more specific, many problems that he studied two weeks before the exam had appeared in the test. Accordingly, he could attend a prestigious college with average reading skills.
Finally, success means making good friends to most high school students, and people who are lucky enough to meet a lot of good people have a higher chance to make good friends. For instance, many students make friend with the classmate who sat next to him. So, suppose the person who sat next to the kind, hard-working student is a thief, gang member, or even drug dealer. Then, if the hard-working student made friends with him, he might also turned bad and went astray. However, if the student is also a hard-working one. Then after they made acquaintance with each other, they could learn lots of knowledge and experiences from each other, become study partners, and enter a high-class university together.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'thee'?
Suggestion: the; thee
...uck has a lot to do with success due to the thee reasons mentioned below. First, succ...
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Message: Did you mean 'companies'?
Suggestion: companies
... specific, he is the son of a famous IT company’s CEO. Consequently, he plays video gam...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, consequently, finally, first, hence, however, if, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, then, for instance, i think, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1880.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53003952538 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.8223593311 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.3333333333 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6666666667 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.375 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151935339993 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0454668181919 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0600255738837 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122799312983 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0936974962472 0.0645574589148 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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