Nowadays,people are more obsessed with buying material things like expensive clothes and cars because people judge each other according to their possessions.
For me, I agree that people are more obsessed with buying material things due to three reasons mentioned below.
First, nowadays, people are becoming richer and richer, so people tend to collect possessions and judge others according to their wealth. For instance, I live in Taiwan, and these days most people are rich enough to buy expensive cars and fancy houses. Thus, those who can't afford a single car or an apartment are considered lazy, low-class, and even pariah in my society. In other words, due to the rapid economy development in my country, people become more obsessed with money and possessions. However, fifty years ago, most people are extremely impoverished, so they usually judge other according to their kindness and politeness instead of how much material things they own.
Secondly, reputation place an important role in modern people's life, so people tend to accumulate their wealth to fulfill their ego. Take my friend Todd as an example. Todd was born in an affluent family. Though he wants to make acquaintance with non-wealthy people, his parents do not recommend him to do so because they genuinely think that making friends with them might damage their reputation. In other words, his parents think highly of themselves about their wealthiness. Nonetheless, Todd's grandparents were born in WWII, and most of his friends and families live in a poverty-stricken area when they were young, so they don't really think that being poor is a shameful thing.
Finally, people nowadays put an emphasis on friendship, so they tend to show off their wealthiness in order to sustain their relationship with others. To elaborate, my friend Jammy was born in an extremely well-to-do family, and he always wants to show off his wealthiness by going to different parties every several days, and he argues that he can befriend other rich people by doing so. What's worse, when he discovered that one of this friend is not as rich as he thought, he immediately cut off the friendship between them. Yet, generally speaking, most people in the past are penurious, so they were prone to friends depending on other people's personality rather than wealth.
In conclusion, I maintain that people nowadays become extraordinarily obsessed with their possession as people become richer and richer. In addition, most people care about their image and friendship, so they tend to judge others based on their wealth.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, nonetheless, really, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2028.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10831234257 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71907328262 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541561712846 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6296465632 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.666666667 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0555555556 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.77777777778 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373001306624 0.236089414692 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128277771716 0.076458572812 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0971302617442 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251858306258 0.150856017488 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104034353848 0.0645574589148 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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